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Peter_Murray5mthReplied to Rodr1goRI think that is Martian Manhunter's disguise on earth.
"Wonder Woman and General Swanwick can wait. I'll find an opportunity to invite them."- Peter_Murray7mthCommented
"Wich" should be changed to "Which".
So the mc has powers wich are inspired by the abilities of the MC of the game: shadow or war wich is a great game. - Peter_Murray8mthCommented
I believe the bifrost was around in this time because Bor, Odin's father, used it in the war against the dark elves before they went into hiding. But I don't mind it not being around at this time.
As of right now in the Timeline Asgard is not a city made of Uru and gold and has not created the Bifrost yet... As of right now, they don't have all the advanced technology that was seen in the Movie... Instead, they have spaceships for now instead of the Bifrost. - Peter_Murray8mthCommented
"ruffle" should be "roughly" I think.
The next day my father decided it was time for me to learn to hunt. Being woken up with the moon a little bit after it's high mark, ruffle 3 am. My brother had healed mostly so he was also awoken. Waking up my father said "Your old enough to learn to hunt, let's get a quick meal and go." We walked out of our partitioned room and ate a quick egg sandwich which was an egg, left over elk steak and bread. As walking out my mother said "Good luck and I will have your sister tell Floki you won't be by today." - Peter_Murray8mthPosted
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I like the choice. People always underestimate humans for some reason.
This book has been deleted. - Peter_Murray1yrReplied to Scathach_
you put down "after they say his" when you should have said "after they saw his" basically change the "say" into a "saw".
He went to learn medical ninjutsu at the hospital at first they chased him away but after they say his talent in the medical field he was welcome to learn from them. - Peter_Murray1yrCommentedCh 13 Decision on Love Interest (FL)
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When someone speaks, could you make it clearer as to who is speaking for example: Person1 said "hello" and Person2 said "hello" back. Or you could use a format like this: Person1: hello Person2: hello It would make reading this a lot easier. This is just a suggestion, you do not have to do it if you want.
Ch 1 stationary - Peter_Murray1yrCommentedCh 14 (MAJOR NOTICE)
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I say finish this because I have read it this far and it would be a shame to not finish it.
This chapter has been deleted. - Peter_Murray2yrCommentedCh 8 Bloody Business and Occulumency