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Sinceramente no original fica meio que implícito que xiao yan fez algo com Yan Yan, da mesma forma q fez com a medusa só q não manga é bem imperceptível.
O autor parece gostar de começar em uma cena e simplesmente corta na metade e você que se vire pra saber oque aconteceu, tava até interessado nisso mas fica difícil quando está faltando elementos, esse capítulo poderia facilmente ser 2 ou 3 mas o autor não detalha nada e corta no meio das "cenas"
He received the same training as Han Sen, I admit he could have started trying to practice before entering the sanctuary. Maybe in a review, I can improve this part, but at the most, he could use the qi to temper his body and strengthen which would make him stronger than han sen from the beginning in close combat. Another thing I would like to change is that since he received the same training as Han Sen, he shouldn't be easily scared, although in chapter 3 the best choice at that time was to run away and seek help.
Alchemist will be a bit tricky as he would have to start on this road from the beginning, but the good news is that he could use the plants from the sanctuary and make gene fluids as this concept already exists he will only need to find the plants that would be beneficial. Maybe found an Angel gene 2 🤔
I'm thinking body cultivation is a good way out since he can't build up internal qi, he could use it just to strengthen his body and build up strength. When he has the Dongxuan Sutra, it will be through him that he will be able to discover how to accumulate the internal qi using the techniques of other novels.
I still haven't decided, there are so many beautiful women in the supergene that it's difficult. But I want it to happen naturally, and one that will definitely be part, the shelter he's in is spoiler enough to discover. maybe I decide the rest in a vote?
Thanks, the good thing is that I'll improve my grammar with every mistake thanks to people like you who, instead of just complaining, show you the correct way to write
ops, my mistake, I'm going to start marking on paper the points he's receiving and I'll go on to specify better the amount he receives. thanks for the reminder