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sad story. so time passes differently at the circus... Circus is kinda like moving limbo then, wow brilliant chapter author, Evangeline a good character. keep going am sorry to admit i kinda giggled and my jaw dropped, he was mourning for 40years! that's some real love right there. but it couldn't be me! 2-5yrs max from me take it or leave it, and am moving on lmao
i know you expanded on Lucifer and her or his twin sister. Maybe explore if there's other entities beside lucifer and hell! I really want someone to slap lucifer lol. joking. But maybe like another god comes into the circus as a sightseer or seer to see lucifers not doing things. and they meet and talk to jonnah where does lucifer mysteriously go when there performing.. its all too interesting Are the dreams of jonnahs sister in hell! a coming reality for jonnah at the end of the like life covenant?? or is it just delusions from him being scarred... ahhh so many questions. am sorry am pitching more questions than ideas. love your storyyy so much. continue on author
Worm guy is back yes!!!!! Powerful quote! Btw author add closed quotation marks "
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Grammar, punctuation, fluidity is all excellent from the author. Flawless flow as you read through, the author is really good with words. This seems more of a book rather than a novel! I must applaud the author for that! The lead's journeying adventure is really interesting, the authors attention to detail is remarkable. Also the internal monologue is superb from what I've read when comparing to other novels of the same genre... I honest to God don't have much criticism, apart from being mad i binge read it, so i want to see what happens next lol! [img=recommend] I will be following this series good job author.....
this chap is amazing..... MIND BLOWN!!
Small minor spelling issues to be corrected. With errors in the quotations marks errors aswell on some chapters. Just separate on some paragraphs away from the general dialogue. Nothing that really stops you from reading or following along. Anyway......... The authors detail of the items, clothes and surroundings is really detailed. Only plea i have is for the author to describe some of the main characters please...lol the environment there in gets some love. Even the wine & cognac's The flow of the story is really good as you go chapter to chapter and the mystery of the bet... spreads. I like how you've contextualized the real life parallels of social media and the spontaneous reactions it draws once something goes viral on the internet. Jo's personality is really funny to read... and her friends as well. Really enjoy this series, once the grammar issues are ironed out its perfect....
This is a really good story. I don't know why but I got Caroline(stop motion animated movie) vibes from it. The story is just so well laid out. Am really surprised, writing quality is extremely good! The author is superb at describing the dread that Jonah is going through as well as building up the world around him. The grammar is excellent, minor mistakes In some parts but nothing to stress over. I just got to say this is one of the best horror's & thrillers I've read!! Best novels, I've read PERIOD!! (IDC if that makes me biased lol) Jonah and alma's story is really sad. He seems to bounce from one plight to another and the pacing is well organized. The internalization of the characters is really relatable. None of the characters are flat, the worm guy was the deal breaker for me... so sad Man lucifer!.......uhhh, i feel angry for jonah. its not even his fault Continue on author, you have something amazing here am going to be following to see where this goes!... P.S i shed one tear, while reading this.. it really gets you!