and I do know this is a repost, but Im calling it as I see it

Hm, I cant say I like the direction of the kidnap arc just to add wolf to the team. it felt forced. i also think the perspective being limited to bellamy is dragging the story a bit. no talk of the foh base, no talk of how they got abducted, no curiosity on how he got knocked out by the mc. no talk of student safety where students were working and visiting, in a place clearly within walking distance of the school. there was a lot wrong with this arc, and it felt contrived to mainly introduce a robot dog. next, the plot will focus on another new team member, because thats clearly what the author is focused on at the expense of other considerations.

i had hopes the story would be decent even if the prose was poor due to clearly a TL or non native speaker, but this shows a poor understanding of the HP universe.

um, weren't Illyanas ankles broken?

its clearly meant to be evan, but the mtl hasnt been proofread at all. usually at least names are proofread for consistency. ill have to see if it gets better or if i can put up with it. im halfway down the page and its a hassle so far.

this was great until the random anti dark force league thing started. i think a 2nd transmigrator opposed to the mc isnt good in most cases. in the cases where it is good, its a murder-mystery type of thing or 2 transmigrators both knowingly opposing each other from the start. this version just completely derails the good plot you had going so far.

Merlin talked to dragons.

i cant read this anymore. i appreciate the poster sharing the initial story, but the writing quality has not just dropped off, but isnt even really complete thoughts or actions at times. I cant read this anymore, its not what got me this far.

ok, after listing all my grievances with the direction of the story, i have to say harry's reaction to the news of the champions was poorly done. someone doesnt work that hard for that long to achieve a goal, especially coming that close, and just shrug it off. i dont care if his brother is being targeted by being a champion. he can feel more than one thing at a time. to use hermione's words, not everyone has the emotional range of a teaspoon. overall, i think the writing in this fic has been pretty good so far, and got better after harry made it to durmstrang. but i think the ball has been dropped here, in more ways than one.

its like if my character rolled a crit in D&D for an incredibly important test that impacts the session in a major way, and the DM just decides to abruptly send the session another direction directly afterwards in a very blatant and stupid way because he thought the check was too hard and no one could actually pass it. its incredibly poor storytelling, for all involved. no one is satisfied with the outcome.

its railroading at its worst.

cowards choice, author.

oh thank god the box of bliss arc is over. i never liked that storyline. so contrived. hopefully now is back to our regularly scheduled programming.

this entire plotline since he decided he wanted a flying summon is kind of ridiculous. fugaku leaves the frontline forces for weeks, or over a month, with what excuse? and now somehow he and jiraiya are trying to storm hozuki castle for this same penniless princess? i thought this author had a good handle on reasonableness by the mc, but it seems that this fic too, is a failure in this regard.

I think each ring of protection went for a bit less than a galleon, as they were 1 use. since he has made over a quarter million, he should have that much in his personal account, minus any random deductions for crafting materials.

good chapter

oh, thank goodness the blitz ball stuff is over.

i have to say these blitzball chapters have the MC so full of himself and everything is such a "runaway success" its like someone had a wet dream and will wake up in the morning and need a shower. frankly, these past few chapters are some of the worst in the fic. I dont even hate the game the author came up with, its alright. the way this has been told just feels disgustingly repugnant to me.

its still 10x-20x the Wizarding population of Britain. Its a frankly ridiculous number, even being one use. I actually dislike the introduction of the quest system

who knows what the magical laws are for opening other people's mail? rowling never covered it that i can recall.