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PeterGriffith

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"Wisdom has been chasing you, but somehow you are faster." -

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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith1d
    Replied to ImagineMaker

    the way he does things like what your synopsis has said, it really isn't adding up Using the full potential of the fruit and all.his made of fire now he could probably fly from all I know, yet he almost died from a mare sea king. and the way he just overall reacting with his environment like forgetting about sea kings existing a moment before one almost killed em, like if you get the fire fruit you'd mostly use it freely and explore it immediately but just gloss over it, you need to show him "actively" propelling his fruit to improve not just put it in the back burner, and dont make the mistakes of most authors on "Telling not showing" show us how he improves on using his fruit.

    Ch 5 Ace's dream
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith2d
    Commented

    ugh what a let down, though good luck on writing this.

    Ch 5 Ace's dream
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith2d
    Commented

    so this half a..ss character is the replacement of Ace? this guy is a down grade.

    Ch 3 Angry fish
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith2d
    Commented

    oh is that a dota reference?

    "That's why 'Witch Doctors' or 'fairies' usually got a five and were given Aghanim's Scepter to mess up the whole map," I mused aloud, recalling the old days in the gaming community. "Of course, it didn't always work out, but who cared?"
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith5d
    Commented

    The story Is very enjoyable, I can now say that You Can Cook.

    Ch 12 Chapter 12 - Outsider
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith11d
    Commented

    Character development my arss, you just wanna make the story unnecessarily long, I'm kinda disappointed with this story.

    There's a wonderful tool called character developement that I fully intend to take advantage of but to do so, our MC needs to make mistakes and have flaws. Remeber the title of the story - we're absolutely not in for rainbows and forgiveness.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith11d
    Commented

    This is interesting

    Ch 1 Part 1 : Damnation. Chapter 0.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith11d
    Commented

    You should re write this chapter, better yet change it entirely.

    Ch 3 3
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    Unleashing Marvelous Might: Whitebeard's Abilities in Marvel Universe
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    I concede, I've finally liked a chapter.

    Ch 18 Unseen Growth, Unveiled Might
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    he is still a sisi I see

    The last thing they heard was a single mumble of "Detach".
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    Cry about it bozo

    A raw, heart-wrenching cry that echoed through the empty camp, releasing the pent-up internal agony and despair that had consumed me.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Replied to Cara_trevoso

    you are the moron here, he is in the shinobi world if he doesn't wanna go kill people just kill himself and hopefully he gets reincarnated in a safer world. now the reason he wont do that is he a pissi pissi MC that's too emotional for the shinobi world, ye I know he has morals so what? it's be killed or kill there anyways.

    Was this truly necessary? Killing all of them like that?
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Replied to BurgerNoTomatoes

    but you dont show him doing the training, you just gloss over it.

    ...That was around 25-30 pounds worth of Bento. I estimated according to the weight I felt.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    is so important for his character dev? if not just gloss over it.

    I'm at a crossroads honestly, I had wanted to skip to the Genin arc, in favor of all those who are patiently awaiting that arc, but there are so many plot points I've done and written, that NEED to be answered prior to that.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    You just to stupid to see it

    A psychopath is what he is.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    I skip the first half for obvious reasons, I'm starting to see why I liked holyjokers story more.

    Ch 12 A Massacre Followed By Another
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    sheesh talk about hero complex, are you related to emiya per chance?

    But... I shouldn't.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Replied to BurgerNoTomatoes

    and you keep doing it, to annoy us.

    And yet... Isn't that an excuse?
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Replied to The_All_in_One

    yeah, it keeps happening and it's not funny anymore.

    ...It seems my plan is not as perfect and simple as I initially thought it'd be.
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  • PeterGriffith
    PeterGriffith17d
    Commented

    Why even bother putting a warning? this is the ninja world, killing is pretty much synonymous with.

    (WARNING RABBIT BRUATLITY IMMINENT READ AT YOUR OWN DISCRETION. NO RABBITS WERE HURT IN THE MAKING OF THIS CHAPTER!)
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