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lol I know Jedi aren't bumped up this fast unless its a special case, times of war, or they are just prodigy/genius.
I've made it so each character has their own unique dialogue and their own way of speaking and being able to tell who's talking and who's replying instead of doing your cliche of saying something and who's replying back only time I do is if it's sentence cut off by an interruption or just plain old thinking. There are small time jumps in the first few chapters because I'm keeping most of the young justice team and adventures the same. I'm not steering from the original vision just introducing a new antagonist and MCs who are not part of the Young justice universe but help shape them into better versions of themselves on both sides. yes I agree the Grammer needs work. I hope I answered most of your core issues with this fanfiction.
He calls himself Infinite Spartan in the reason no matter even if he dies the Spartan armor and his will shall live forever he wants to bring peace for the metahumans and citizens of apokalypse that's why he's called the Infinite Spartan.
why do you think it's too clunky?