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Yanvar19dCommented*West -> east
"I figured… I'll gather my remaining men and I want some tank crews with us and we will begin pushing west toward Algeria," I say while showing him my planned movements on the map laid out on the table in the command area.- Yanvar2mthCommented
she knew* ?
When he waded back into consciousness she was relieved, even ecstatic but when she came to see him, when she saw the look in his eyes she it was the end. - Yanvar2mthCommented
*don't want
"Plus I don't to break the machine." Homelander finished as they all felt a distinct burning smell caused by metal rubbing on metal. - Yanvar2mthCommentedI know many of you are accustomed to fanfics where the protagonists become overpowered within 10 chapters and start killing everyone and collecting girls, but this fanfic won't be like that, I hope you understand. This won't be the kind of fanfic that has a timeskip every few dozen chapters.
- Yanvar3mthCommented
*here -> hero
"Hmh, see now usually I'm a sucker for a revenge plot and considering you were my here growing up I'm even inclined to help you but there is just a small problem." - Yanvar3mthCommented
I recently had the realisation that I've never read a Dragon age: Origins fan fiction story, I don't believe it's a smart move for you as there is a smaller audience than any big license and it's a bit hard because it's a game not a book or film but a man can dream
But I would like to ask what you would like as my next fan-fiction. - Yanvar4mthCommentedChapter 29: islands
- Yanvar5mthCommentedWhen Dio was about a meter away from Jinx, she finally took initiative and fired an eldritch explosion in his direction.
- Yanvar7mthCommentedCh 30 Coruscant: Jedi Council. Interlude.
- Yanvar8mthReplied to Jadefrog
- Yanvar8mthCommented
I would advise the use of "queue" it's less vulgar for the same meaning, i believe it would fit better in Fleur's mouth ...
"And did these changes include you becoming wider at the shoulders, a more toned body with thicker thighs, an amazing ass, higher cheekbones, sharper facial features, a little stronger jaw, more attractive nose, and a bigger la bitte?" Fleur asked me with a broad smile at the ending. - Yanvar9mthCommentedCh 23 Almost as if...
- Yanvar1yrCommented
"... What of my son ..."
"And? What if my wayward son and his new-found ally, this mortal you speak of...?" Belial asked as he turned his attention to the kneeling fiend. "Where are they now...?" He added with a thoughtful expression. - Yanvar1yrCommented
i'm not a native speaker but i believe you want to say "their whole body"
Thoughts raced, and the dark figure had identified the uninvited guest. A kind of panic that swept through the whole body. - Yanvar1yrCommentedCh 44 Consequences
- Yanvar1yrCommented
the 1st Bella -> him
Jacob stared at Ethan with an annoyed look on his face; he seemed to be jealous of Bella. Ethan didn't feel anything for Bella, and he knew she didn't feel anything for him either, but he didn't mind resting his head on her head as he looked at Jacob, just to spite him. - Yanvar1yrCommentedFlipping through the channels on the television, he found a series playing. It was called 'Everybody Hates Chris'. It looked like a simple comedy show that would keep him entertained for the next few hours. Ethan opened the snacks and drink and rested.
- Yanvar1yrCommented
"so we are going out to eat" i think would be more correct, i'm not a native speaker so i'm not sure.
"Oh, I'm going out with my family today. My brother is going back from his trip today, so let's go out to eat." She replied, hurrying up. - Yanvar1yrCommented
i don't understand the question, "are they Brave" ??
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