There is a free version of grammarly that would very much help your grammer to make the story more easily read

I would definitely suggest the use of a writing assistant tool such as Grammarly to improve the attention to grammar in this story

Yep

No

This was a decent book until chapter 69. The problem I have and this goes for a lot of these types of novels, is that they knowledge that would theoretically come in the next 100 years such as him getting the flying car technology. Him having an AI bodyguard that is a living person as well not to mention. I personally do not like that these were added as I feel it ruins a flow of a story heavily and begins to ruin any sort of normality in the world. The writing quality was decent, updates seems to be stable, but the story in later chapter does not match the quality in the earlier ones.

I am very excited to see how this story is going to build up this new character and make connections in a world we have seen few fanfics in this style create. Highly r ecommend

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Hey author, to fix up some of your grammar use the site grammarly it is free to use and will help with punctuation and reword or suggest slight change of the sentence for better understanding.

A big problem I have with this novel is the drama and I feel most people that read far enough know what I’m talking about. If the drama was removed and the story had another storyline I believe it would flow better as the drama ruins the flow of the novel. An example being the drama about Will being a dad, for the conclusion to be pointless and if you took out this section of the novel nothing would have changed.

So much extra drama I feel is pointless

The was the extraction for the guild so much?

Try grammarly to fix your grammar and puncuation

These last couple of chapters were useless and hopefully this will now happen again

That fight scene was super rushed, and also he lost wayyyy to easily

Good just captizalize the first letter of your paragraphs

Ivy Potter and Daphne is the best option so far since you have built the characters to be rivals of a sort. Give the people the legendary threesome!!!

Why be born as izukus brother? Why not go the classic orphanage route?

Nobody will see this, but why does everybody say jojos first part is terrible. Both of the first parts of jojos are actually good.

Dont read this here, some other guy on webnovel has already posted up to 350 chapter of it...................................................

Dont read this, just rewatch one piece. Nobody wants to read about a side character the entire time they want a main character and that is not what this story is. Dissapointed..............................................................................................................................