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Karamin_Alhaki_62876dCommentedBeing HIS GIRLFRIEND not being her boyfriend
"John... I'm here because I'm sorry I left you two years ago because I fell for Travis' seduction," Rachel said with a bend in her face. "I thought being her boyfriend would be fun because he looks like the ideal guy. he is so sweet, caring, moreover he is an obstetrician, but I don't get along with him, I don't like seeing him treat his patients who are dominated by elite and beautiful women," she continued.- Karamin_Alhaki_62876dReplied to Keyboard_Immortal
This cannot be typo. It happened too many times. Author should proofread work.
No matter what, Bai Susu had given birth to his child, and he ought to take responsibility.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_62876dReplied to TheFoolishKing2152
Hmmm! You mean you've not reread your work? Disappointed. when you say child, you mean ONLY ONE. but if quadruplets, then they are children. You've been making references to and mentioning child for a while now. Then you interchange when you should say children with child. So it makes it difficult to follow. At a point, you said daughter instead of daughterS (emphasis on S to mean more than one). Did I need to spell this out for you? Please read the last two chapters to see what I am saying. Because of that, it may be confusing on whether to settle for one daughter/child or many daughters/children.
No matter what, these four children were also of the Bai Family bloodline. And since the grandfather always loved children, accepting them wouldn't be very hard. But Ye Fan? The Bai Family would never accept him.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_62877dCommented
Please check the grammar her. Then, 'you aare my brother ' not my sister if it's Matheo speaking.
"Matheo... Only you I have besides John...I'm responsible for taking care of you because you're my sister, how can I let you fight alone when I'm living comfortably here?" Phoebe asked so seriously that she ignored the food in front of her. - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dCommented
I think author should try to help readers know when a paragraph ends or when the previous narrative ends and another begins. This doesn't flow . It's like cut and paste.
It was already eight in the morning, but I was still in bed, covering myself with my blanket. - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dCommented
never GOOD enough
"I think I'm used to it, but... It's still painful," I uttered to myself, and tossed myself on the couch. I don't even remember what the reason was why Noah married me. I am never going enough for him, especially with his family. - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dCommented
Now four children?Please stop confusing the readers.
No matter what, these four children were also of the Bai Family bloodline. And since the grandfather always loved children, accepting them wouldn't be very hard. But Ye Fan? The Bai Family would never accept him.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dReplied to Inka87
Hmmm! Got tired of correcting. Author had a daughter in mind after writing chapter 1.
No matter whether Bai Susu acknowledged him or not, as long as he himself recognized her and their daughter, that was enough.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dCommented
Author, it seems you wrote this with only one child in mind, later changed it but not the tenses that go with the change.
"I broke up with her. Don't worry. I will be responsible for you and the child. From now on, you are my wife, Ye Fan, and the mother of my child. I will protect and guard you both for a lifetime," Ye Fan said sternly, looking at Bai Susu, the foolish girl who had taken on so much alone.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_62878dCommented
His child? I thought there were 4 (children)?
No matter what, Bai Susu had given birth to his child, and he ought to take responsibility.detailRecently Dumped by Gold-Digger, Goddess Asked Me to Sign a Birth Consent FormUrban ¡ Silly Little Bok Choy - Karamin_Alhaki_628712dCommented
what 'transpired' here...
"I know that. But I couldn't let you do that earlier. No matter what kind of a woman she is, she is still your mother at the end of the day. It won't look good if you go against her for me. I didn't want things to get uglier than they already were at that time." She took a pause and added, "You better not let anyone know about what conspired here tonight. Especially not my Elle. It won't end well if she knew. So, please, don't let anyone know. Okay?" - Karamin_Alhaki_628712dCommented
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"Why would I believe in those words?" she retorted. "But that doesn't mean it doesn't hurt when people say that whoever loves me only has one end and it's death. Why? What have I done? I didn't kill my parents. So, why am I blamed for it?" - Karamin_Alhaki_628714dCommented
I hope you're not contradicting yourself You said his weight on the bed made her 'rollover' to him/his side. Implying the bed wasn't wide though soft. Now She moves away leaving a huge gap between them. How? She shouldn't be able to do that since she could roll over to him again because the bed is soft and his weight will deep the bed (like a hammock).
She turned her body away too, leaving a huge gap on the bed between them where the sheets dipped down to form a visual boundary. Both stiff and angry, mirrored in posture, and each staring at blank walls ahead of them in a silent standoff. TangShi had lived through her fair share of insult and injury from callous people, but never had she been as incensed as this at the hand of a stupid man. He seemed to be able to trigger a fiery response that had long lain dormant in TangShi, and she could not push down the urge to turn around and smack his head with her pillow. She had never had violent tendencies of any sort and here she was wishing to hit him with anything close by. - Karamin_Alhaki_628717dCommented
đ˛đ˛đ˛đ˛đŻ you raised your hand on someone who hasn't offended you? Someone older too? How shameless.
Yang Li slapped her hard and berated, "You old thing, now you think to beg me?" - Karamin_Alhaki_628717dCommented
You let your daughter go settle a score? đ¤đ¤đ¤
Yang Guochao watched his daughter leave, then said with a distressful expression, "My child, our family won't let that loser go!" - Karamin_Alhaki_628718dCommented
He BARELY saw her cry.
In the long years they have been together, she had always acted strong in front of him and he barley saw her cry. The first time he had seen her cry was on the day they broke up through the surveillance camera. The second time... was today... right at this moment. - Karamin_Alhaki_628720dCommented
Is it the womb or the pregnancy?
Amelia's womb had turned seven months old. Her stomach was getting bigger and bigger and she was now starting to feel uncomfortable sleeping and had difficulty moving. What's more, before that Amelia was fat. - Karamin_Alhaki_628720dReplied to JesReadin
And it is not an idiom.
Chapter 4 The truth will out sooner or later_1 - Karamin_Alhaki_628720dReplied to
That is 'old English'. Then you should have used quotation marks for it. If used like you used it.
Chapter 4 The truth will out sooner or later_1