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Very empty, give too much power to a protagonist and you generate hatred, plus the fact that he does not need a power up for now with everything he has, if he trains him he could defeat thragg and the novel would end shortly after, I know the author said it is nfws with a plot but it develops it too well for me to drop it because we asked for more nfws
Personally, I think it's better to give it to Amber or get it herself because the suit gave an ordinary human the strength equal to Mark's, imagine giving that to a vultrumite with speed strength, too rotobromoe the plot, although it would be great if he could mess with that story, I seriously don't like the protagonist, he reminds me of Peter from the guardians of the galaxy, hateful, crybaby and very immature (even cross it out, Starlord was better than him, for God's sake)
You could use the villains that I know are shown in the comics, not all of them are great villains but there is mention of some that you can use from time to time to fill in, there are also the spin off comics of invincible that can help further expand the universe of this same , or use drama, the rex and eve thing can be used to complete a mini arc and make it a good arc
It is obvious that Orochinaru took the most dangerous jutsus while with a genjutsu he deceived the village, it could also be Danzo trying to destroy forbidden power or take it away or Itachi trying to create a more peaceful Konoha
Tengo una idea y si usas esas historias en tu otro fic el del gordo aun se podría ya que si usan aun magia y fantasía no lo dejaste tan desarrollado para no poner cosas de la vida real, ey curioso usas lo viejo para dar algo nuevo como con McDonald y sus comida
Esta historia vive no por la frecuencia sino por la calidad
Doble diversion yay es hora de joder a Luis solo traigan al hermano de navi
Rayos otra bandera prepárense para la violacion inversa
El mejor recurso ¡GALLETAS!
Ya quiere traerla a casa
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O dios encontraste a tu waifu