sentence check

Hiii, thanks for the chapter! Suggestions or reminders. Cap lock beginning of every sentence. I see you used it here and there, but try to make names, titles, or locations caplock so it stands out (Glade, Patriarch, or even the World Tree) Anyway, keep up the good work!

what

sit the = *here* or *there*

making the "please" what word go here?

out = put

below...some reason cant type there

tree = threesome

fix this and the bottom paragraph *Dear, may I*

better to stick with *cough*

creak

Sigh

lighting = lightning

stop with the *Ding*...use brackets better then ding this ding that.

ace?

not cough, is ahh choo or sneeze something like that

to the author... the words mourn and mourning are for something else. Here, you need to use moan, moaning as in making lewd noises

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

I'm not sure if I miss it (info about Divine Lake). how long are they down there for? do they need air? don't they need to breathe?ty for your hard work!!

thx for the chapter, keep up the good work!!