Tsetth
Secret founder of the Levon Bew Sect, and the creator of the Seven Heavenly Celestial Manuals. 1st Manual: IJOTWCTD 2nd: TFOQCR 3rd: TGT Join the Levon Bew Sect: https://discord.gg/tEdkhmrj5g
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Tsetth4dReplied to ThorHe showed promise...
Chao uncovered a dish on the table, revealing a packet of fine, white powder. "I have prepared this. It's tasteless and colorless, and we trust you'll find the right moment to administer it."- Tsetth4dCommented"I wouldn't say that," Chao replied thoughtfully. "You will travel to many places. You're now learning the assassin trade and excelling at it. I'm sure Congming will send details about it to your clan. When that happens, they might ask you to come and serve. Then you can serve the clan and travel long distances, but discreetly, and only when the clan's interests necessitate it. That's not much different from any young master of noble lineage. Did your father, Xuan, have the liberty to choose his role within the Sacred Sword Sect? Do you think young clan masters relish being dispatched to inspect towns devastated by the demonic, listening to the complaints of nobles, and purging nearby villages of demonics? True clan members have limited autonomy when it comes to their movements and life choices. As I said before, unless you hold a position of power, you're merely a cog in the machine."
- Tsetth4dCommented
Feels like your writing continuously then cutting the long chapter into two, maybe thats why the start of some chapters feels so weird...
Boluo continued "And he pointed out to the guest lords and ladies that their strength should be their own jewel. That was how Xuan was—by example, and by the grace of his words. So should any real young lord do." - Tsetth7dReplied to NovaEre
He gets skinner in later chaps...
Just when Sol was trying to think of an excuse as to why he didn't know him, Mar-Dule huffed a plethora of copium and said. - Tsetth8dReplied to NovaEre
Yeah, that's why I left it there to remined myself, but sometimes I still forget. Imma fix it now...
This paragraph has been deleted. - Tsetth8dReplied to NovaEre
Think of it as 'Arrrgh', like when you're using all your strength to lift a heavy object...
Sol had grabbed the flat surface of the massive sword between his two hands. Then with veins bulging on his forearms, he released a loud growl as he used brute strength to stop the illusory sword. - Tsetth8dReplied to NovaEre
Yup, his mother is Hemera goddess of light, but this relates to a separate system of power that doesn't influence his Innate Dharma/Immortal cultivation...
As the blinding green glow began settling down, a small tree could be seen within the light. - Tsetth9dReplied to NovaEre
Know I wasn't trying to be condescending by suggesting looking at the situation as a whole. I suppose I suggested it so you add that perspective to your suspension of disbelief...
'Even so, I'll still try to save anyone I can. If I die then so be it!' - Tsetth9dReplied to NovaEre
It's hard to change a reader's mind once they've already have a perception of what the book is going to be about, but its definitely not going to have plot or characters interacting like that. Oh, I guess you could read the top comment in this chap and a few others ones to get what I'm saying...anyway if you decided to continue do leave a commit if your opinonin's changed...
'Even so, I'll still try to save anyone I can. If I die then so be it!' - Tsetth9dReplied to NovaEre
Oh, then did you finish the chapter? If you think this is going to be a common theme for the mc then it isnt, given the circumstances of the situation, Sol was still in denial that his father couldn't protect his home, and you could say his words just now was said out of anger because his father told him to run away, something that went against the many lessons that his father always taught him. I know his words said here sounds like something those self rightious mcs would say, but if you zoom out and consider the situation from a wider perspective you might have deffering opinion. I know the type of mc's you're thinking about, but if you continue reading I think you'll prob trust me not to create those types situations for the mc or force him into a situation just for plot...
'Even so, I'll still try to save anyone I can. If I die then so be it!' - Tsetth9dReplied to NovaEre
lol, did you rly
'Even so, I'll still try to save anyone I can. If I die then so be it!' - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
Haha, I suppose that's what I was going for, for readers and Sol to share the same feeling of having their expectations dashed...
As for Han Min's current condition, he was currently three meters tall, and though his size looked imposing, with him missing an arm while a huge hole was in his chest, he looked rather weak and frail. - Tsetth10dCommented
in person*
After four years of only communicating with each other via communication jade slips and secret messages left around the Academy, they finally meet in real life. Thankfully, it's as if nothing had changed. - Tsetth10dCommented
disciple*
Heon-Tae asked as he saw the disciples frown before looking away. - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
Yup, but most readers aren't gonna commit this to memory even if they were distinct names since this is just a backstory info dump. The names will only get familiar when they're brought up in memorable moments later on in the book... well this is what i feel after reading and writing books...
The Seven Churches, the Ga-On Church, the Ga-Mon Church, the Ga-Mok Church, the Ga-No Church, Ga-Nok Church, Ga-So Church, and Ga-Sok Church were equally as powerful as the Warlock Families; with the Ga-On Church being as powerful as the Beorhtric family. - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
Yup, it'll eventually be explained in later chaps thou...
"Answering Bishop Adalhard, Han Min is not from our village. He came here several decades ago with his child and offer to become our village Guardian, our village Guardian had just died, and given his strength, the village Chief agreed." - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
Nah bro, just differing opinion is all...
Maybe if he was just a little stronger… like his father. Maybe things wouldn't have turned out like how they would. - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
I think it was alright, given the mood i was trying to set going forward...
On that journey further into the future, the boy would look back and wonder how different things could have turned out if he had paid a little more attention to those Evangelists. - Tsetth10dReplied to NovaEre
I thought of this before writing it, and I decided to still keep this scene as it could be explained that the child thought that was just the smell of the paint. Paint itself has strong smell as well, and the child wouldn't be able to distinguish it from blood.
As Adalhard lied through his teeth, he raised his clearly bloodied hand and wipped a bit of the blood on the child's nose playfully. - Tsetth11dReplied to Reading1sLife
Through context Im sure one could tell that something is wrong with Sol's birth that caused his age not matching his looks, and if one is really reading into the context of the convos surrounding this topic, one would realized that Sol was must have been in something like an incubation period during those decades after his father brough him to the village... I left hints of this, and thats the fact everyone is treating him like a child including his Father even when they are alone, even Sol himself thought he was ten, those decades don't count into his maturity since he wasn't even conscious of the world yet as he was still just a baby in incubation... as for why he was in incubation thats explained in future chapters....
"*Sniffle*… Father said there is no shame in a man crying. In fact, it makes them brave simply by letting others see how vulnerable they can be. And I'm… I'm only ten."