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there's a champ named Lee sin i think the name fits just fine?
Arthur is a normal name? my brother's name is Arthur named after my grandpa. it's actually a really common name
slight error (not a big deal) you kept referring to fish rolf and Hermione as the 3 boys when there's 2 boys and one girl .instead you could change it to the 3 kids. you don't need to change it if it's a hassle just thought I'd point it out :)
my advice don't follow the pull as it may lead to you losing motivation for the story. it's your story not the readers so do what you want most don't care for some small plot holes and as long as you still write what you want and it doesn't come out as gibberish people will still continue reading.
Harem ff suck not because the harem itself, its because when a ff has a harem its usually the authors sex fantasy putting themselves in the mc place and writing all there fantasies about the characters the want to f and the ways they want it to happen. So 90 percent of harem ff are just unappealing to read
So if I read right, something auto unlocks if he knows exactly how its made? Then can't he just use the internet and look up a ton of things searching how pretty much anything useful is made? Guns,food,explosives,bulletproof vest,fences,etc. Also if so since lightsaber is in the list can't he also look up how its made to?I'm pretty sure its explained somewhere on the internet. Along with tons of other useful fantasy or sci-fi weapons?
Plus the reality marble part doesn't have too look like emiyas so you can choose a design for his reality marble for ubw. Ps the ability belongs to another character named shirou (spelt different but still the same) so it fits
Maybe give him UBW from fate its a strong ability but only when it copies a lot a strong swords but the naruto world doesn't have that many strong swords except for the 7 swordsmen of the mist swords. So it won't be too strong but he will have infinite weapons for any fight provided he has the Chakra for it.
I'm really liking this story so far although it could do without the harem. Definitely worth it to pick up. Let's just hope the author can keep the harem at bay and doesn't ruin the story with it, he's already got 5 women with a possible 6th. My suggestion to the author slow down on the amount of women and try to develop his relationship with them before adding anymore. I've seen to many good ff ruined by the harem aspect.
inches* i misspelled that
Say you give him Edward elric, his clothes would mimic his his hair would turn blond his eyes gold his arm and leg metal and lastly he would get a couple inces shorter
Honestly I'm fine with the way it is but if you do change it don't just change the clothes. Hair, eye, and skin color should also change to match the charicter