Best novel 10/10 better than my son is a monkey this is like stephen king but not dead hahahahahahaha xd pdka-0so=d-a][s;d];d]]ds]da]sd]lsd[]l[pwsdl[

Where is the bacon at, Chief? I have been searching for bacon all throughout this novel and have found nothing, Tis' a disgrace, a crime, and most importantly, a betrayal. Without bacon a novel becomes a meaningless experience. You've disappointed me, dear author.

There are almost no grammatically errors throughout the whole story that I've read through so far. Characters are interesting and have depth, however at some points they feel underdefined. Frequency of updates is commendable, when referring to the detail found in the writing. The world starts out with a dense personality, but slowly expands allowing for greater versatility. overall, I am quite impressed by the quality of writing, and dedication to the work you've shown, and hope to be able to follow your work in the future.

Your grammar,(Tenses and punctuation in particular) takes me out of the unique story that you present, however this uniqueness stems mostly from the under-utilized military genre. Your characters although well defined, are cheapish and flat, sewing confusion into the plot as it is easy to confuse one, for another. The world, however is very unique. A great background for your story and honestly impressive.

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Writing an old man is difficult, but this author has the capability to execute well enough. I hope he continues with this story until we, the readers, and him, the author are satisfied with it.

Just my two cents. This story might not be, "My cap of coffee".

The way your feelings are being conveyed is absolutely stunning. Straight, and right to the point. It is simply splendid, phenomenal, and exciting. I don't have enough words in my personal dictionary to describe it. I can't wait to feast my eyes on what comes next, my dear author.

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