buddy having knowledge doesn't mean you can do anything that's what I hate about most fics they mention system gives him memory of certain skill and boom they're executing those moves like pro.... i mean what about muscle memory!?? are your muscles developed to move in that way knowledge needs to be practiced for any use otherwise it's useless that's why i added this sorry training arc of 6 months 😶‍🌫️

it's hinted in the further chapter what was hindering it... besides mc is currently weak why would he wanna mess up with something that's messing up THE SYSTEM... 😓 my mc or system won't have god complex thinking themselves omnipotent they will work and behave in a certain set of rules... I mean we're not animals here are we? we have to have rules 😐

I am a first time writer and honestly I was bored with the usual story where every character just pops up in a novel and starts training and boom in the next few chapters soloing the strongest character in the existence of the story... so i kinda skipped the normal training route and just have him body condition and move on to story 🤷

great story author It feels fresh that someone has courage to write DBZ crossover without being sayian :3 Just a little advice about your story, it seems like a narration of events happening instead of an actual story try to write more character interactions give time to plat feels way to rushed like you're just skimming events... otherwise it's a great read keep up the good work ❤️

you planning on upgrading sharingan??? because I see a great opportunity here as sharingan is composed of yin chakra and senju was yen so when both were combined it transformed into rinnegan here as I remember this primordial dragon give yun che some high quality yang power so you can use this as a base to upgrade 🤷🏻‍♂️

if you need to know everything in the world just spread the mobile phones and build an AI to Carter customer needs and also spy on every one secretly this way you won't have a problem of rebellion unless you build an Ultron 😅

good story so far.... pace is also good... no need for that quick mastery bull***t and 10 year old fighting garp 😅😅 just a suggestion instead of going for every beast in anime verse just pokemon is sufficient you can also make him have a goal to start the great trainer age you spread pokemon across the world of one piece that'll be great story to read but if you already have plot in your head then go for it... My idea was just giving you a purpose for mc... ✌️✌️

just don't make all affected be the good guys as that'll just destroy the charm of the story...

jonin asking another guy to save his genin students?? 🤔

great story so far author San... ❤️ the idea of fujitora and hidden stone village is refreshing 👌✌️ just wanted to say since you made your mc integrate with fujitora you should know how cool headed that old man is and your way of demonstrating your mc is hot headed which is totally opposite of fujitora he is fighting like he's the Chinese main character and the rest are canon fodders mind you that ATM he's the weakest in bunch 🤷🏻‍♂️ just work on it little bit since you just started writing it's reasonable but you can always improve keep up the great work 😁🤗

buddy you making hashirama way too op like seriously give emperor their due respect they are top of sea and you making it sound like hashirama can kill her on whim or something this in my point of view will just make story boring and bland 😔

why not introduce marvel and DC verse basically there is tons of tv series which can be introduced

while on subject of mafia you should consider John wick

this is by far one of the best naruto fanfiction out there.... keep up the great work ✌️👍

not complaining just a suggestion you should try to complete many different introduction and reaction of towns people before going all over the places for eg: you missed perfect opportunity in main mission you could introduce many town people and there reaction to changes happening in town and how they are getting registered... this is the kind of thing which makes this type of genre more exciting... that's why I loved black tech cafe.

thanks for chapter... man I'm great fan of your previous novel IKOTT as for why because it had it's own unique rhythm and I loved it.. now here you're trying to go with same writing style but for it just doesn't fit well I hope you can find the correct writing style to this novel and bring it's original charm out ✌️

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there's plenty of room to grow in haki as well no matter how big of a meteor you shower if it can't even touch logia what's the point

best chance for mangekyou sharingan awakening in story logically is end of sabody when kuma send them all flying... and it's an ability of sharingan if I'm not mistaken just make him drain after that one use don't be like madra when he just cast this jutsu casually.... besides it's not that big of a deal in one piece as ishou can do it to and doffy bird cage can cut it as well after time skip make him just as strong as madra after madra is the power of sage of six path then his mother (forgot her name) 😅 there's plenty of room to grow Short summary: it ain't a big deal in one piece what madra did back then coz many hashirama lvl and above exists in one piece

author san I don't know your plans about war of great but please make place for John's tengai shinsei with susano like madra did in 4th great ninja war (it would be great if you sync it with White beards tsunami attack at the beginning of war) ❤️🤩