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Come back here, you damn*d Translator! Just because you edited a few earlier chapters, doesn't mean you need to abandon the next ones! I'll comment like this in every chapter I found has a flaw and you just left it at it is since the day you release it!
I see, you're a typical stubborn writer who can't accept criticism, always stick on your own wrong perception, and always justify that what have been formulated in your own brain added with "wiki" materials is only truth.. Transformation jutsu doesn't work that way, it's just change outward appearance, similar with how genjutsu work. If a pebble transformed into a sword, no matter how many you slashed or pierce something with it, the blade will be always dull.
Now the whole novel is finished, aren't you gonna fix all the mess you got from using MTL? Honestly it's kinda garbage TL for me, but I stay because how good the story is..
That's the wrong approach if you decided to bend everything in the story for the sake of reader. And please try to have 1 point of view for stability. I definitely drop this if you mix both 1st and 3rd POVs in the same chapter, so please just use 1 of them for the nex upadates until you finish this work.
Mu review until this chapter: 1. I will count and assume that aithor is either a newbie at writing or just inexperienced writer who want to try to put his delusional turn into a story 2. I'll let it pass as the work have decent writing with 90-95% grammar correct 3. I'll assume this story is not based purely MCU but another universe and this MC is just another variant of Peter Parker, because all characters you got inserted so far is not comic and movie accurate
The concept is good, but writing is so terrible and hard to read. It would make sense if the author is not a native with English as his/her primary language. The grammar is thrown out of the window, the vocabulary is a mess, the plot is just like teenager greedy with power and trash mixed personality
Why did you write how Kataoka so adamant for not having Rei to be the Ace? Is Kataoka an idiot in your story? Choosing super talented player even though a bit rebellious like Rei is lesser evil than waiting Sawamura talent to bloom in his 2nd year, even Furuya weapon by being fast throw doesnt help the team in crucial moments in manga and anime