Jasonenrick
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I don't understand the hype around this novel, but considering it seems to appeal mostly to younger readers who are illiterate...I understand it. The story is rife with clichés, except for the part where his sister doesn't suddenly gain an extraordinary talent around chapter 20, which is somewhat unexpected because this Novel could be renamed to RE: Cliche. However, the rest involves the author contriving reasons for other characters to be stronger than the main character (MC), seemingly to prevent the MC from becoming too powerful. The concept of time in the story is also poorly handled. For instance, in the early chapters, he was supposed to meet a woman named Alex at noon. She comments that it's not nearly noon and questions why he's there, but then, within two minutes, it suddenly is noon. The lack of attention to detail is insane. Written by a kid it seems. Additionally, the story falls into the trap of claiming that leveling up isn't as important as other tasks, yet randomly, characters who have focused on leveling up all along end up being more powerful than him, which feels like a weak excuse for a plot. This novel is disappointing overall.
Go to sleep, kid. you obviously haven't read the original Story.
I assume you haven't read the Fanfic. The problem here is in the fact that the real Voldemort when Back in time and meets a Huffepuff him? I don't remember what he wanted from his younger self, but Voldemort wasn't your average nice, kinda, and all forgiving one. He would have Killed his younger self here and there.
So, here we are. There are several reasons I rate this so low. The main point is that Mc has no steady character. He changes his character and his view of things more often than women change their clothes. And now I know why people say that he is a simp and a cuckold hahaha. I mean, he loves her and is in a relationship with her, kinda, and doesn't have a problem with other men sleeping with her. Wow. Also, there are so fucking many plotholes it in insane. Like, literally every chapter I can count out things where I am like: Yeah, but this makes no sense. Disappointing
No, you are xD. Read yours as well while at it haha
Wanted to add something that I just noticed now.....Why do his soul traits not get stronger? It was shown that other people could get insanely stronger by having more Links of Loyalty as was shown in the first assessment, but apparently, this isn't the case for the Mc because there aren't any improvements shown.
The reason is very simple: Your world-building and consistency is crumbling the more I read ahead. And this is one, if not the biggest problem, a story can have. And you managed to do this quite often. Just by logical thinking many things make no sense and the biggest problem you have is trying to make your Mc seem overpowered and then introducing lousy excuses for others to be as powerful as him. For example: Annable managed to get from Peak Tier 0 to Low Tier 1 Lord, the same rank as Michael even thought he only went from Lowest to Low Tier 1 Lord. What did Michael have to do to achieve this: Kill thousands upon thousands of Tier 1 Monsters and dozen of Tier 2 Monsters. My question: What the hell did she do? Kill some Tier 3 ? Sure........ Makes no sense at all. Like I said, no consistency and making up random things to keep the story alive.
cry more hahha
I hope you are joking...or there is no hope left for you
Apparently, you don't hahaha. I love it when I talk to brain-dead people. They have no arguments and can't accept that they are false. Now my "monkey" fits even more. You are like a child, no arguments, no common sense, but they throw tantrums all the same. "I have no arguments.....so I don't care I am not the wrong one " grow up
No :D. I actually just wrote it for my own enjoyment. I don't even think it's particularly good, but I thought that maybe some other people might enjoy it, so I'm considering posting it. However, I want to continue writing, you know? Build up some puffer before people begin to ask for chapters that I can't provide xD.
Ah, okay. Good to know. I am writing a 'Game of Thrones/A Song of Ice and Fire' fanfic, which has about 100,000 words at the moment, with each chapter containing about 1,200 to 1,500 words. However, till now I was not quite sure how this looks visually. So, thanks to your help :D