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Equilibrium12318hCommentedwhat type of pov is this it kinda is annoying
"Finally, I haffe fully Hadabted to mein new body." With everything that Maximus has become, the weirdest change is probably his German accent. A minute after you were an American, why the hell do you have a German dialect??- Equilibrium12318hCommented
the part where you say as you can tell is fourth-wall breaking and immersion breaking
Finally, you could even be as detailed as you want with these wishes, making it seemingly more than one wish, but in the end, it will still be considered as one. But sadly unlike those fairies of his, I can only grant 3 wishes for you, and you cannot wish for more wishes, but that doesn't matter because it is EXCITING to let your imagination fly as far as you want!!!!!...… at this very moment now wish for anything you desire Max!!!!!" As you can tell….. Nirrothos was beyond exhilarated in imagining just how much chaos Max could cause and to someday become something more than just strong, but to become insanity incarnated... - Equilibrium12319hCommented
was he trying to say ‘nègro’ as in the colour black in spanish or are you making a slightly racist joke author?
'And now that's out of the way, all I can see now is nothing but ne- I mean darkness, and moving around feels completely impossible for me at the moment. Well, now I have to wait and..... accept this very moment and hope to see the faces of my loved ones again and tell them just how much they mean to me. Maximus Adolf out.' - Equilibrium12319hCommented
bro died from the oldest trick in the book
'I mean seriously, of all the times I could go outside and make it to my family's grave with flowers that I so carefully 'picked out,' there had to be a FUCKING banana peel waiting for me as soon as I got out through MY!! Apartment front door; - Equilibrium12319hCommented
author no offence but you have a bad habit of repeating sentences that mean the same thing in different words
"Here... just remember, it's risky," he cautioned, his voice laden with solemnity. - Equilibrium12319hCommented
I know you are referring to the lickers but nowhere did it say they were following him up the stairs
Hurriedly, I dashed down the hallway until I reached the stairs. Passing by offices filled with unsuspecting civilians, I extended my tentacle and commanded them to eliminate every human on nearly every floor, except the last one—reserved for me. - Equilibrium12319hCommentedLooks like it's stairs for me, damn it.
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the first half and second half of the paragraph don’t match. In one he implies he is killing kingpin because it would be annoying if he stayed and in the next sentence he says he is leaving anyway
I'm planning to take him out. Well, truth be told, he hasn't really done much to me, but I know if I stick around New York any longer, that jerk's gonna be a thorn in my side. Honestly, after today, I'm seriously considering leaving New York behind. I want to venture into other places, explore forests, and other countries and, of course, instill fear and wreak havoc. - Equilibrium12319hCommented
why expose your intelligence
I looked at the helmet in my hand. "If you see me... fuck you." I threw the helmet on the ground and broke it with my leg. I left. If there was a camera in that helmet, well, I hope you like my beautiful words of a gentleman. - Equilibrium12320hReplied to aMz
doors are locked from outside
His stomach churned at the sight of the grotesque carnage before him. Averting his eyes from the grisly tableau, he spotted figures resembling zombies, feasting on the remains of the dead. Fear clenched at his heart, but he knew he had to retrieve his phone, regardless of the horrors he might encounter. - Equilibrium12320hReplied to Random_Entity
if you like the villain having plot armour go watch my hero the villain has more plot armour than batman and captain america combined
"What a shitty story..." I muttered as I watched the monitor in front of me. The plot was kind of boring, nothing interesting, with the protagonist always defeating the villain with "the power of friendship." - Equilibrium12323hReplied to Yoboiduggy
the competition? or the martians? because if you are speaking about the latter they are as technologicaly adept as cave men rn
By the end of the very first day, he got his hands on things he had learned everything about how microwaves, washing machines, printers, coffee makers, computers, phones, cars, radios, and even advanced Wayne Tech TVs. - Equilibrium12323hCommented
ey my fellow readers I hear the dissatisfaction but the author clearly wants his character a certain way. If you guys don’t like it you can go and read the thousands of other stories that happen to have that perfect cookie cutter personality that you guys seek. The mc in this story voices his thoughts and does not hold them in like a jedi would nor indulges in them too much like a sith would
Unperturbed by Panaka's rising temper, Peter met his glare with a calm, unyielding gaze. "Yes, I am," he said firmly. "You didn't see what I saw. Stakar and his clan are monsters. I found them in a brothel, raping women who would've gladly slept with them for just a few credits. Stakar doesn't deserve your mercy; he deserves death, just like his clan..." - Equilibrium1231dCommented
thats a big time skip 💀
The continent is mine. Everything is a bare wasteland of death and destruction. - Equilibrium1232dCommented
why not show him to 049 bro would get on his hands and knees and worship bro
"I should request a cross testing with The Lich and 657." He said, as he took the drink and felt blissful. - Equilibrium1232dCommented
unless that tank bullet is some eldrich monster in disguise or made with love the lich wouldn’t even flinch
Hassu stared at it. It almost killed him. - Equilibrium1232dCommented
confirmed goku can beat the lich (joke)
"Granted. Good luck surviving in the SCP Universe." - Equilibrium1232dReplied to Blast_Niro
I know you are correcting the sentence but it sounds like you are trying to send this man to his certified and trademarked doom 😭
"What character would you like to be reincarnated? Or if it's your taste, still the same?" - Equilibrium1232dCommented
how about you leave you overgrown duck
Silence fell for a moment, each member of the crew processing Revan's words. Howard finally broke the quiet, his tone softer. "Alright, I get it. But it doesn't make being bossed around any easier..." - Equilibrium1236dCommented
bro switched one last time before dying
Revan's ghostly figure shimmered slightly as he met Peter's gaze, his expression unreadable beneath the hood. "It's complicated," he replied, refusing to say anymore.