feyfell
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feyfell2yrCommentedCh 601 Conclusion and Spatial Compass- feyfell3yrCommented
That's a lot of variations of "check" in two sentences. Please don't take offense as I am enjoying the story very much, but I've noticed a lot of repetition. Mainly over emphasizing details which could have done with less.
"I'm just patrolling around. Although this place has been checked, it still needs another checking. The other teachers also started checking this place to make sure that it's safe," Shirotsuka Sanae explained. - feyfell3yrCommented
couldn't *
At this point, Han Sen was facing the wolf alone, but the wolf even hit him, which made the wolf snap harder. - feyfell3yrReplied to ProdaG
nope.
At the back of the stands, too young man in sunglasses were whispering to each other. - feyfell3yrCommentedCh 135 Not a Wonderful Match
- feyfell3yrCommented
the second "calmly" is redundant.
Sure enough, Qin calmly dodged all the strikes Han Sen made calmly as if she were dancing. Meanwhile she fought back from time to time with grace.