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sagajr24dCommentedARC's -> ARCs; LAAT's -> LAATs
This would eliminate quite a few of the enemy Geonosians while not include the Jedi's in the crossfire. The ARC's would then spread out and attack all enemy fighters but then retreat to continue helping the bombers bomb the main battlefield. The 5 ARC's from the LAAT escort would then continue what the other 10 started and make sure the enemy fighters won't pursue the bombers. While the ARC's engage the fighters, 25 LAAT's would deploy around the arena. 5 in a circle in the middle to pick up the Jedi knights. 15 would also form an outer circle to draw fire from the 5 transports. This would give us more time to pick up injured Jedi's. Then the 15 others would enforce air support and bombard enemy forces on the ground while also sending missiles at fighters in the air." Dust said.- sagajr24dCommented
ARC-170's -> ARC-170s; LAAT's -> LAATs; Jedi's -> Jedis
"Hmmm, so this is what I suggest we will have the Y-wings form up in front of the LAAT's. We will then have 10 ARC-170's form a formation around the Y-wings to defend them. This will direct enemy fire upon these people and they have an easier time defending than the LAAT's. We will also have 5 ARC-170's defend the rear and the LAAT's. These 5 will continue to protect the LAAT's until we land safely back at friendly base. The Y-wings will bomb around the Jedi's. So the outer perimeter of the arena where the droids would come from." Dust said - sagajr24dCommented
LAAT's -> LAATs
"Hmm, while we could spare the fighters and bombers for your operation at the start. We will quickly have to retreat as the ground troops are gonna have the main force of the Seperatist upon them quick quickly. We also need the bombers for the core ships. Similarly the fighters will be exposed to the B2 droid cannons and they will cause more damage to the bombers than necessary. We also do not need to deploy more than 40 LAAT's as we only have close to 600 troops and each LAAT can take 30 people. " The Rear Admiral said. - sagajr24dCommented
LAAT's -> LAATs; LAAT/i's -> LAAT/is; AT-TE's ->AT-TEs; ARC-170's ->ARC-170s
"We have around 60 LAAT's in our hangar. 12 LAAT/i's and 30 AT-TE's. Alongside that we have 50 ARC-170 Starfighters and 70 V-19 Torrent Starfighters. All the V-19 Starfighters will be deployed to protect the venator and to fight in space. 35 ARC-170 Starfighters will also be deployed outside our command. That means we have 15 ARC-170's to protect us. Which should be sufficient enough. We also have 12 Y-wing bombers at hand." One of the Captains said. - sagajr24dCommented
alle -> all
1 and a half hour later Dust arrived at the Command Centre. Upon arrival he saw that each of the Captains were there and Commander Cody. They were alle standing around the communications control and looking at the map of Geonosis. - sagajr24dCommented
LAAT's -> LAATs
After all the LAAT's arrived at the Venator Cody commanded the Captains to set their troops up and be ready for hyperspace in 3 Hours. Dusk then went to talk to his Lieutenants. - sagajr24dCommented
LAAT's -> LAATs
After being briefed Cody ordered the LAAT's to take off. The LAAT's then flew into a Venators in their airspace above Kamino. - sagajr24dCommented
injured Jedi's -> injured Jedis
"You and your company will join me and our battalion in extracting the Jedi. After this I will take the injured Jedi's and get them to safety then join Marshal Commander Gree in taking command of the sector army, meanwhile you will take Master Windu and the Jedi's to launch a flanking attack on the Geonosian Headquarters. Currently my Battalion does not have an executive officer. Usually a Major would be given this position but as we currently lack officers above the rank of Captain I will assign you as the XO during this battle." Cody said. - sagajr24dCommented
all the Jedi's -> all the Jedis
"We have been assigned an important task by Grand Master Yoda to extract Palawan Skywalker, Master Kenobi, Senator Amidala and the Jedi reinforcements. We are to take our forces to extract all the Jedi's." - sagajr24dCommented
Infependent -> Independent
"The Confederacy of Infependent systems and The Galactic Republic is at war as you may have realised. We clones have been assigned our first duty as the army of the Republic." Cody said while showing a map of Geonosis. - sagajr24dCommented
screamed --> shouted
"Men, form up!" Dusk screamed. Upon his Command all his troops formed up in a marching formation. Dusk then did a strict 180 and looking at the 25 LAAT's. "Prepare! Forward! March!" Dusk screamed again. Immediately all troops began marching in a strict military formation. Upon arriving at the Acclamator he ordered his Lieutenants to take command of his troops and to lead them to their respective LAAT's and prepare for takeoff. Dusk then immediately went to a LAAT designed as a Command LAAT, which had a command map and communications within it. But it was just a normal LAAT. - sagajr27dPosted
Dear Author! You do know that there are no such thing as Omega Plus Psyker Level, right? Omega level is not a psyker but the opposite, its the most powerful blank/untouchable/psychic-null/pariah. Psykers, who are aware of their abilities and can control their them to manifest powers, are the Iota, Theta, Eta, Zeta, Epsilon, Delta, Gamma, Beta, Alpha, Alpha Plus grades. While the blanks are the Sigma, Tau, Upsilon, Phi, Chi, Psi, Omega, Omega Minus grades The most powerful psykers are Alpha Plus and they are, unless they are created by the Emperor himself or called Malcador the Sigillite, will be immediately sentenced to death within the Imperium as they are uncontrollable, unstable psykers of immense power that the official and hidden rulers of the Imperium do not tolerate. Heck, unless closely monitored and directly trained by the Inquisition or trusted Space Marine Chapters, not even Alpha grade psykers avoid being hunted down and eliminated. It probably won't be as much of a problem if your story is placed into an Alternate Universe version of 40K where human beings can reach such high psyker levels while remain sane and keep control over their abilities, but that will greatly weaken the Grim Darkness of that Universe.
- sagajr1mthCommented
ship's --> ships
With the Super-destroyer gone, the UNSC fleet led by Admiral Cole managed to win the battle and cause the Covenant to flee. Out of the 20 Covenant ship's, only 5 were able to escape, while on the UNSC side 12 ship's were lost during the engagement. - sagajr1mthCommented
ship's ->> ships; it's --> its
It appeared as though the Covenant had figured out which UNSC ship's posed the most threat and they had started targeting the Leviathan. While the Leviathan was a carrier in name, Axel had retrofitted to be able to stand it's ground. - sagajr1mthCommented
hit's -- > hits
The Super-Destroyer reeled under the unyielding barrage. Another volley of Archer missiles left the firing tubes of the UNSC ships, their fiery trails slashing across space to collide with the staggering behemoth. The Super-Destroyer shuddered violently with each successive impact, each explosion further compromising its integrity. The energy shields held of the counter attack by the Covenant fleet allowing the UNSC fleet take the direct hit's from the smaller ships. - sagajr1mthCommented
ships's --> ships; destroyer's --> destroyers
The other ship's in the Covenant Fleet consisted of destroyer's, Cruisers, corvettes, and frigates. And they had already started to turn towards the UNSC fleet, so Admiral Cole ordered the fleet to engage. - sagajr1mthCommented
it's --> its
To Axel he knew that this was one of the Covenant's Super-destroyer's which would prove to be a problem for the UNSC fleet because of it's firepower and it's defenses. - sagajr1mthCommented
Super-destroyer's --> Super-destroyers
To Axel he knew that this was one of the Covenant's Super-destroyer's which would prove to be a problem for the UNSC fleet because of it's firepower and it's defenses. - sagajr1mthCommented
Covenant don't have any super destroyers. They have super carriers, the 28 km long giant ships, and their smaller cousins the assault carriers (more than 5 km long ships, larger than even their own battleships).
To Axel he knew that this was one of the Covenant's Super-destroyer's which would prove to be a problem for the UNSC fleet because of it's firepower and it's defenses.