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I played world of warcraft since 2004.. then finally quit 3 years ago.. I made sure to delete my account to make sure it 5 unrecoverable. you put enough time into a game & decide to quit you'll do the exact same thing! it's completely realistic to me to have it happen. it ain't no plot device lol
are we just gonna ignore the giant tree & dead monster?? hmmmmm
*Happy krieg noises intensifies*
good intro but a heck of a run on sentence
Why the heck do so many stories use a prophecy format?! it's such lazy writing from the author. this book was already hard to read with the obvious grammar errors, bad spelling, and now prophecy trope.
you literally just said in the previous paragraph comments that the reason he took the question wasn't because of exp but because he took the quest in last life aka he wants revenge & something else I don't remember. anyway, keep it consistent when writing, there's so many plot holes in this book already
okay so here's the thing, why are you putting these details in the comment section? add it into the story. it cheapens the story when you over explain every single thing in your book. just some friendly constructive criticism. also plenty of spelling mistakes or wrong words used.
This book is a good attempt at writing but there are plenty of mistakes that make it hard to understand what is being said. For instance, the pov changes are quite wonky and confusing, characters genders are mixed up, tons of tenses that are misused, and sentence structures that makes no sense. It's an admirable attempt at writing by not a non native English speaker. I know I wouldn't be able to write a coherent story either. Best of luck and keep improving! I'll check back in the future and update as needed.
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Pls stop adding death for failure in missions. It's really an annoying trope in system novels. Why not have the system downgrade the inn or take things from giftshop if he can't pay, or have a debuff for x amount of time, or some other kind of punishment. This death cliche is in a lot of system novels and turns off alot of readers.
This book is such a disappointment. It had lots of potential but the author has ruined the characters. Unnecessary drama between the leads, and lots of problems. Skipped ahead chapter wise and the problems continue. I rarely write any reviews but I feel that I had to for this. Interesting world lore background, but main character is too naive on current chapters. Spaee yourself from the pain, and from reading this.
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Haha he wont want his help. Watch im callin it now