this entire Naruto arc is boring and really cringe. As some people pointed out before MC seems like a Chinese character, blaming everyone for his problems's.

this entire chapter was annoying with mc personality being emo/brooding and cringe lol

thanks for the chapter!

really good story! Hope you have more chapters for us in the future

Hi, I've been following you since the first few chapters of the trials: path to godhood, I even remember your second fic in the slash dog/DXD world. It's a pity that you decided to stop writing fanfictions but it's understandable. Hope everything goes well in this new phase of your life!

It was good in the first 10 chapters or so, but the author forced a really bad plot and chapters 12 and 13 just killed my interest in this fic. Besides the forced plot a lot of characters from asoiaf are either one dimensional or behaving like OOCs.

A really well written book with interesting plot and magic/supernatural background. Looking forward for the next chapter!

I usually dislike writing reviews here, but I think most people commenting are really unfair . I just finished chapter 22 now and, till this very moment, there's no cuckoldry or any kind of sharing between the mc and another male . The only smut chapter that we had was closer to netori than anything. Besides that, I'm really enjoying the slow development here, hoping for more chapters

Ainda não terminei de ler mas tô gostando da história. Só por escrever em português tbm já merece no mínimo 4 estrelas haha.

I think his mother is either DJ or Lynne

His mother is neither Dawn, Adrienne or Amber . The only important one's left are the girls from his family and a few friends. I think BJ mother is probably DJ or Lynne, both are important in his life but with few chances of marrying each other.

I honestly think you are doing fine here, both the plot and development. Although I still think Red personality isn't the best thing here it still somehow bearable, I think. Even the grammar isn't that bad, considering u are using a translator. Things would definitely get better and entertaining here if you fixed MC actions, making him a solid personality instead of this one with messy and random choices .

this is basically the worst chapter till now. You have a very good story here but your MC is unreasonable, childish, selfish and that's ruining everything. The comedy and jokes here were very badly done, too forced and maybe even a little disgusting.

If you truly wanna make a Blackwood king in the iron throne you should choose another timeline. It's probably easier to become a king consort by marrying Rhaenyra Targaryen in the beginning of the dance of dragons or even marrying a Targaryen or Blackfyre princess in the first Blackfyre rebellion. Besides that, only by using crossovers or exploiting asoiaf magic powers like skin changing. You could have a SI Blackwood and skin-changer traveling the world, learning magic and later "reincarnated" in a Blackwood child. This way you could strengthen your house each generation, amounting sufficient power to become a Great House and Lord Paramount and later aim to the Iron throne lol.

This book took a turn from a good storytelling to a full on crackfic lol.

mahouka is a really good novel but there are very few fanfics about it, unfortunatelly 😪

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I think the situation could be done a little better, maybe interrogating/torturing the old man till they had enough evidences... The way it was done can leave people a bit sus of him, but whatever.