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LordXannie

LordXannie

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2018-06-30 JoinedGlobal
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  • LordXannie
    LordXannie7mth
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    Its an alright story, and could probably rank in top 10 of all GoT fanfics. However there are several issues that make it hard to read. If you want a decent enough GoT Fanfic to kill time I would suggest it. Pros: Fast updates: 44 chapters in 8 days is pretty fast. Different story line: Its nice to see a different story line from someone related to targaryens, or starks. As well as fact it takes place in a city you barely see in shows/books. Cons: Info Dumps: Most obvious of them is the info dumps, as others have said you should add them as auxiliary chapters, they end up ruining any immersion and make you want to skip through. Reached chapter 15 and I think only 3 chapters so far have been not info dumps. Then you get into chapters that are not info dumps chapters, and you find more info dumps. Chapter 15 alone was like 6-7 paragraphs explaining what the dothraki were, which could easily be explained in 1-2 paragraphs. Grammar: The grammar is alright for most of it ,but there are quite a few mispellings, and other grammar issues in each chapters. While not a big deal, it still causes you to lose immersion when a name is spelled one way and then not spelled right the next.

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    Game of Thrones: Victor Di Natale
    TV · marcoo
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  • LordXannie
    LordXannie2yr
    Replied to Aht

    Thats 15 Billion mate, with inflation since 96 I think time was it would be around 30 Billion give or take several billion.

    Funds: 15.000.456.159 - USD Dollars
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    MARVEL: GAMER PATH
    Movies · CORNBRINGER
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  • LordXannie
    LordXannie2yr
    Commented

    Wrong way around xie, the monkey joke goes to you.

    "At least wash your face. Eat decently. You looked like a monkey."
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    Revenge of the half-demon cultivator on his second life.
    Eastern · Unorthodox_Quill
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  • LordXannie
    LordXannie2yr
    Posted

    Good job you sea monkee! Can't wait to see the wine addicted monkee in action again bullying everyone. Now come back to baby lizard gang server so we can continue messing with you.

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    Revenge of the half-demon cultivator on his second life.
    Eastern · Unorthodox_Quill
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