Review Detail of LordXannie in Game of Thrones: Victor Di Natale
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Its an alright story, and could probably rank in top 10 of all GoT fanfics. However there are several issues that make it hard to read. If you want a decent enough GoT Fanfic to kill time I would suggest it. Pros: Fast updates: 44 chapters in 8 days is pretty fast. Different story line: Its nice to see a different story line from someone related to targaryens, or starks. As well as fact it takes place in a city you barely see in shows/books. Cons: Info Dumps: Most obvious of them is the info dumps, as others have said you should add them as auxiliary chapters, they end up ruining any immersion and make you want to skip through. Reached chapter 15 and I think only 3 chapters so far have been not info dumps. Then you get into chapters that are not info dumps chapters, and you find more info dumps. Chapter 15 alone was like 6-7 paragraphs explaining what the dothraki were, which could easily be explained in 1-2 paragraphs. Grammar: The grammar is alright for most of it ,but there are quite a few mispellings, and other grammar issues in each chapters. While not a big deal, it still causes you to lose immersion when a name is spelled one way and then not spelled right the next.
Game of Thrones: Victor Di Natale
marcoo
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marcoo:That review took you some effort, so I will reward you. I will stop writing for now and edit all the chapters. Remove the information that is not related to Westeros into another chapter, correct my spelling and grammar. Maybe I was a bit too stubborn for my own good.
marcoo:That review took you some effort, so I will reward you. I will stop writing for now and edit all the chapters. Remove the information that is not related to Westeros into another chapter, correct my spelling and grammar. Maybe I was a bit too stubborn for my own good.
Bro I havent even read the story but this is the first time I have seen such a humble and ready to improve author. I will add the story to my library. Keep up the hard work man.
marcoo:That review took you some effort, so I will reward you. I will stop writing for now and edit all the chapters. Remove the information that is not related to Westeros into another chapter, correct my spelling and grammar. Maybe I was a bit too stubborn for my own good.
Finally, I will try to read this novel again just for your comment, although it is good information, it is very busy, if you like it, just put a small summary, If people are interested, she will do research on it. I haven't even seen how many times it's happened, I found something interesting in some fanfic and went looking on the wiki, it was supposed to be a quick search for just a few minutes... And I spend hours reading about it, and everything related...
marcoo:That review took you some effort, so I will reward you. I will stop writing for now and edit all the chapters. Remove the information that is not related to Westeros into another chapter, correct my spelling and grammar. Maybe I was a bit too stubborn for my own good.
marcoo:That review took you some effort, so I will reward you. I will stop writing for now and edit all the chapters. Remove the information that is not related to Westeros into another chapter, correct my spelling and grammar. Maybe I was a bit too stubborn for my own good.
Yup just cause of that effort ima read this. I like aruthors who try n fix there work. Some people might hate but keep it up man
marcoo:I switched 8 chapters full of information to Auxiliary Chapters and will edit the rest for spelling and grammar now. I hope to change your opinion on the novel :D