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I meant there was no tension in the interactions, no conflict or stakes. The only stake Is if he ignored them they will be sad. Which would not affect the "plot or at least that would introduce som level of tension and weight in this interactions. Story = entertaining, this fells like I'm sitting through someone's daily life, & I can't skip the boring parts
No need to feel attacked, & get defensive. I understand my phasing could have been hars ( depending on the reader) & I apologize for not taking your feelings into consideration. I wrote that after chapter 23. I loved the interactions at the beginning but after 9.. it got tedious to get through... Yes, I read ( more like listened) to every word. I use a text to speech software. If I'm listening to a good story, were something interesting or important is a constantly happening I purposely slow down my listening speed & enjoy it slowly cause there are no wasted words. I do that for you story when he is not talking to his family & neighbors... Basically, new characters & hospital scenes. But the way you write dialog feels like a chore to get through, so blitze though them at 4.7x speed ( & I was still able to follow what's going on with just just a few interactions being clear). Basically focus on efficiency of words in dialogues... or don't it's your story.
There is too much redundant useless stuff. Reading it feels like it watching a soap opera,, with 2 manu dialog that lead to owhere. 99% of these interactions can be cut down & 70% of the scenes can be cut down, if they are not adding to the plot or a setup for future reveal or funny or cool you don’t need to write them. I am reading onle line from every 5-10 paragraph & am keeping up. That is such a waste... This is good story, start cutting down scenes and dialog to make it a great one
Y u gotta write about pedo characters "good ones" & butcher well established characters for badly shoed in Segs sceens. If u qre going to be a nasty lemon writer at least put in som 50 chapters worth of work before you slowly butcher a well established character & use it for an utterly pointless segs scene... U suc, b better
Unreasonably impatient reviews. I don't like how much character development the author put into this story, to make a premise this dumb & boring become a master class in character development. I sware, WebNovel is the worst place for anyone to try writing a half decent story. Author for the sake of your brain cells, please stop reading dumb comments.
A good character driven story, surprisingly ?not? Homeopathic ( not confirmed yet) . I love the development so far (ch 30) A few chapters are extremely unlikable (*cough* bro-con ) but I see great potential & hints of positive character development. But + for believable characters . Can't wait for our boi to wife up narcisa, & ONLY BE WITH HER, I like the fact most chat members already have love interest. So this isn't dimensional harem group. MC, became "relatively" OP outa nowhere... I would prefer if he had a cost for using "his" luck.