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Melon011dCommentedSasuke actually loves tomatoes as much as Naruto loves ramen i believe. in case you wanna mention it in your story
"This really is delicious" Arriving next to Naruto, Sasuke took an oyster and murmured.- Melon011dCommented"Who's gonna stop me?" Kai tilted his head. Ah. Sweet revenge. Wait…
- Melon015dCommented
this one sounds interesting
4- This is also the last chapter where Iruka-sensei is going to be a major character; yeah, Iruka would appear throughout the story here and there, but he wouldn't get as much of a role in the story. - Melon019dReplied to Melegant
your correct and her flames only worked on demons as well but I assume that isn't the case here
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or have fun in bed with a girl. in one of the comics i think he gives MJ cancer
Probably shouldn't be donating any blood before he figures out that little thing. - Melon019dCommented
licked!?
Tenten couldn't help but laugh, her heart lighter despite the serious undertone of their conversation as she licked his shin for the comment. - Melon0110dCommented
it should have hurt them when he said that. and to begin with no devil mention the one above in any shape or form
"Oh thank god!" - Melon0115dReplied to Adamo_Amet
just offering my opinion don't actually have any intention of interfering in how you write your story. i am loving it especially with how much depth you are giving to each character and the world of Naruto. keep up the good
Will Naruto get Wood Style? Eventually, I guess. - Melon0115dCommented
personally I didn't want him to get it since it will just problems at this point in the story in my opinion. another thing would be that it's overused. every Naruto fanfic ends up obsessing over hashirama and his bag of tricks.
Will Naruto get Wood Style? Eventually, I guess. - Melon0116dCommented
I thought there was something similar in one of the Naruto novels I don't know which one though
2- Chakra Grain, yes, this is my own concept that I introduced into this fanfic. It doesn't exist in canon. Why did I introduce it? Well, I have a lot of reasons: - Melon0116dCommented
most definitely
Also, thoughts on Iruka Sensei because, in my opinion, he is a Chad. Do you agree or not? - Melon0116dReplied to Adamo_Amet
wouldn't something like these be a little better since they don't have a curved point? iIlove the weapon idea by the way but the neko-te seem to have curved ends which is for clawing not poking like the hyuga do to close tenketsu point or whatever. or i might not be correctly recalling how their martial art works
What is Neko-te? - Melon0119dCommented
excuse me? by any chance do you aspire to write your own book at some point? cause I'm already impressed with just the first paragraph.
My life is a counterfeit coin, glinting with false promises, but hollow inside like their idea of honor. I'm Ryu Kenji, a seventeen-year-old ghost in a city that never sleeps.. Six years ago, my world went up in flames. Dad, the gambler, the dreamer... they say he made a deal with a devil in a thousand-dollar suit. And the price of that deal? Me. Since I was eleven, I've breathed the stale cigarette smoke and cheap cologne they pump into their backrooms - they transformed me from a boy into currency. - Melon0119dCommentedHearing Ikaruga's story, Alfonzo and Elicia looked at her with disbelief. Originally, they were just comparing Quatro Cerberus' guild hall to the Yellow Flag bar from the Black Lagoon anime in their past lives. But now, they come to find out that Black Lagoon was a part of this world, too.
- Melon0120dCommented"One more." She said and I complied. "Another" Requesting for more. "It just isn't enough I need more of you." She then put her arms behind my neck and kissed me more enthusiastically. I hugged her waist and licked her lips, asking for permission to open.
- Melon011mthReplied to Flamableslug
yea but in this case he wants the technique so he can strengthen his hinokami kagura. I believe his goal is to complete the sun breathing since the hinokami kagura is imperfect
I can't remake Stone, Love, or Serpent, don't possess the weapon for those, Moon requires powers and I'm specifically focusing on swordsmanship right now. - Melon011mthCommented
the same happened with Ichigo and his crew
He stepped closer, lowering his voice. "I suppose it was to be expected, feeling something so beneath your own league requires a mastery that is far beyond you. I'll get to the point, Adam, their energy... it shows a change. It seems their exposure to you during the years has left some... marks, and is now altering their souls." - Melon011mthCommented
you still have to put the soul in her new body no?
Knowing there was nothing more I could do for Cordelia or Cana, I rolled to my side, pulling the covers up around me, before finally closing my eyes, allowing myself to drift off into a peaceful, deep sleep. - Melon011mthCommented
go ahead make the change otherwise I think you will end up dropping the story anyway
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