One thing is that you made your Mc way to strong way to fast he’s op to the point that there isn’t any suspense in anything he does if he wants to do something he does it with little to no issues or set backs meaning you could literally just make a list of his accomplishments and it would be just as suspenseful

Uh oh now you spoiled us and we’re all going to expect alternate titles for every chapter going forward

Ha nice

Aboard the black ship

Grammar is total crap barely readable POV changes are badly done and conversations between characters are hard to follow

A thought on the minor characters. Adding more members to their secret meeting place could work with short time jumps and brief intros with Tom maybe using it as a way to recruit talent you know finding smart kids and bringing them into the fold so to speak to make them feel special so he can use them later on down the line maybe once Minerva graduates since she might not be to open to the idea

Don’t forget in the marvel universe the Great Depression was orchestrated by several wealthy individuals who may not appreciate someone drawing attention to their own money making schemes

Was enjoying this story so shame about dropping it but your right it’s your story and you shouldn’t have asked for opinions. If you restart the story or start a new one altogether then I would suggest not even reading the comments until you have the story firmly established.

Going to be honest this is a good idea for a story but the author will most likely drop it because there isn’t anyone who realistically posses a threat to the Mc even thousands of years before the main characters of dc start showing up. If it were a slower burn or build up of his strength it would have a longer story but with his quick growth it’s not going to have any suspense going forward.

Not necessarily voting for this the only question you should ask yourself is what would the expedition have access to I mean time wise this is before halo 1 would they even have such advanced weapons?

I’ll be blunt this book had potential until the author decided to make it an insest novel where one of the pair is a 14 year old so yeah maybe change the damn tags so people don’t get triked into reading something they don’t want to

So many continuity errors that it gets completely unreadable by around chapter 50 not even worth the read. Possibly more than one author is the only thing I can think of as to why so much of it is wrong so often

Could have been good but somewhere between chapter 100 and 200 an entire arch of the story is missing which makes the later chapters confusing as crap therefore it’s not worth even starting