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BlueBlueLemon

BlueBlueLemon

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Hope Real Life stops kicking my balls soon.

2018-04-04 JoinedGlobal
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Replied to mightymc_plane

    1 RL = 1000 gold

    Each roll ws priced at 100 Royal Coins each which is abnormally overpriced. Thankfully, he got a chance to roll one because it was included in unlocking the Item Shop feature.
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    The Legendary Daddy Merchant
    Fantasy · BlueBlueLemon
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Replied to ikka

    I don't have plans of adding romance soon.

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    The Legendary Daddy Merchant
    Fantasy · BlueBlueLemon
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    Taking a complex subject and making it into something simple does not reduce its quality in any way. Instead, it helped us the readers to appreciate it more. This novel is something like that. Coming from the concept of time travel and being placed in the political side and war between two worlds will and always sound confusing. But the author was able to direct the story in a way that we can follow while still having the beauty of these complex topics. Writing is great, characters are good, and there is a lot of potential for the world building. All in all, a recommended read!

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    The game of revenge
    Sci-fi · Maryam_Zahoor
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    Living like a doll. Such a wondeful premise having the protagonists desire to cut their own strings. It may be to change their string of fate or the string they do not want to be, it is a story that dwells on the journey to break loose on these shackles. Relationship between the protagonists is like bread and butter. One compliments the weakness of the other story wise and literally wise. A great romance story with a steady development that is backed with an interesting plot. A good read for this genre!

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    All Strings Attached![hiatus]
    Fantasy · Scourgie
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    Author here! I like to thank to those who read Legendary Daddy Merchant and those who stick around. I'm going to say this in advance, but I am planning to make this a long term project so hopefully, I would be able to write a lot of chapters. That is why the story development is a bit slow. It's my way of coping up in real life because in every chapter I write, I at least feel a little accomplishment from it. However, slow it may be, I try to make the journey smooth and enjoyable. So feel free to vote and add it to your library.

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    The Legendary Daddy Merchant
    Fantasy · BlueBlueLemon
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    I enjoyed it until the end. It was a compelling story to read with two perspectives in the same world with totallt different situations. One born as a baby while the other turned to an armor. Truly unique setting, but what I enjoyed the most was the quirky dialogues the author put up. There are still things to discover so its a recommended read with a whole lot more to offer in the future.

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    A Hero for this Dragon
    Fantasy · Breno_Ranyere
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    A recommended read! It has that nice steady build up that leads to a great climax which have you wondering if there are more. I like how the characters are not centered on the protagonist alone, and the moments of his teammates does not lose to his. I only hate the part where the author comments the possible dropping of the story. I hope author continues more of it.

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    Ghost Busters
    Urban · Lonewo1f
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    This is a review a to motivate and hopefully help the author for later chapters. Since there are barely any chapters yet, I will base mostly on the synopsis for the plot... There are interesting points provided on the synopsis that can easily attract people. But it would be better if author rewrite and fix it to appeal more. The best thing so far is the world background. I can see its potential to be one of this book strong point depending on how the author will continue. And the part where it needs the most improvement, is the technical writing. I am not an English teacherbor anything, but it can be a turn off when some paragraphs are difficult to read. I suggested something in the comments so I hope author sees it. In conclusion. The strong points of the book for the meantime is little. This can be attributed to the lack of chapters, but with good premise, there is a chance for this to be great.

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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    I suggest the author to install a grammar checker even if its the free version. It can really aid you when writing especially when you do not notice you have made a mistake somewhere.

    Ch 2 I don't tolerate mistakes
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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    'cloths' to 'clothes'

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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    'as fur' to 'as far'

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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    Need some changes here like 'I am back' and 'few (blank)'.

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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    100%... Preach it fellow students.

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    Meta Human
    Sci-fi · Thatguyray
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    Thanks for the chapter... Congratz on the contract.

    Ch 4 New Faces
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    Thirsty Royals.
    Fantasy · Dee_author
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    Often times it would be difficult to judge a cultivation story when there are only a few chapters posted. But the relationship between the protagonist and his father is somewhat unique to the take because often times it is a solo ride for the protagonist until later on. Since this is the first novel the Author wrote, there are more obvious mistakes. But all of it can be fixed and hopefully author will improve as more chapters are posted. An example is the use of "quotation marks". (You should be more careful where to place it.) The plot development is still little but it is there and I can see potential in it. Characters are also on the way to develop into something nice so it is something to look forward. All in all, it was a good quick read. Hopefully there are more in the future

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    Cycle Of Nirvana
    Fantasy · Uragos
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    One man army

    There was not a half-minute between the annihilation of the 13 clan leaders and the army's charge towards the young man. Within half a minute, the young man killed everyone brutally. Not a single survivor!
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    Cycle Of Nirvana
    Fantasy · Uragos
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    A good start for a cultivation-themed novel. But that also means it needs a bit more chapters before it the story can really shine. Great writing, literally and figuritavely, for the author. But the later chapters are different compared to the first few. (Author did mention it) Cultivation is a tricky genre to go into because there are already more than what I can imagine. Like I said, it will take a few more chapters before it can be something unique but I believe this story has the potential.

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    Time-Immemorial
    Eastern · Exxalted
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Posted

    Just like what the title says, hero that has been overly nerfed in his game world. There are a lot of novels going with this premise, but author take a unique stand on it by giving the protagonist the desire to be someone like King Arthur. Writing is good and I see no obvious grmmatical problems so far. Pacing of the story also moves well despite it being a few chapter. However, it is important to take note that the protagonist will grow as a character as more of the story develops. A great read with a weak to strong theme with a potential of having an amazing world development.

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    I was a Nerfed Hero in Another World
    Fantasy · kuhaku_sora
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented
    Aferous pointed his forefinger in my direction and instructed, "Guide this man to Uncle Roger. This adventurer needs your help."
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    I was a Nerfed Hero in Another World
    Fantasy · kuhaku_sora
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  • BlueBlueLemon
    BlueBlueLemon2yr
    Commented

    Nice school

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    I was a Nerfed Hero in Another World
    Fantasy · kuhaku_sora
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