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empire11dPostedI really like the story so far and I think it is a good story concept. Though it could really do with some editing, I found having to make sense of certain bits really took me out of the story. Maybe try and find a beta reader or give chatGTP a go. I do hope the Auther keeps going though as this story looks like it has some real potential and the grammar is still better than a lot of the translations on this site
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It had been a sudden chance meeting between them. The boy had left his book in the cafeteria and Lex was tasked by a teacher to return it to him. He had been curious about the Mathematics book which was not taught at the school. Being bored, he had solved all of the sums in the whole book in only 32 minutes. He could have done it even sooner, if not for the action of drinking tea in between questions.
It had been a sudden chance meeting between them. The boy had left his book on Cafetaria and Lex was tasked by the teacher to return him. He had been curious at the Mathematics book which was not taught at the school. Being bored, he had solved the sums of the whole book in 32 Minutes. He could have done it sooner, if not for the action of drinking tea in between. - empire11dCommented
However Benjamin or simply 'Ben' was extremely weak in Chemistry, Physics and Mathematics. He took tuition from the biggest Professors in London, yet was struggling in those subjects.
However Benjamin or simply 'Ben' was extremely weak in Chemistry, Physics and Mathematics. He took tutions from the biggest Professors in London, yet was struggling in those subjects. - empire11dCommented
Robert or Lex couldn't help but sigh at the antics of the boy in front of him. Benjamin Drake was one of his seniors, or perhaps a close friend despite their age difference. He had been insistent on joining MIT to study chemical engineering. His family had a paint business and were one of the wealthy lots of London.
Robert or Lex couldn't help but sigh at the antics of the boy infront of him. Benjamin Drake was one of his seniors, or perhaps a close friend despite their age. He had been insistent to join the MIT to study chemical engineering. They had a business of paint. And were one of the wealthy lots of London. - empire11dCommented
"Lex. We did it. I succeeded in cracking the entrance exam of MIT. You were right on everything mate!" The boy exclaimed happily. He didn't bother about the personal space of his little friend and immediately grabbed the boy in a hug.
"Lex. We did it. I succeeded in cracking the entrance of MIT. You were right on everything mate!" The boy exclaimed happily. He didn't bothered to check the personal space of his little friend and immediately grabbed the boy in a hug. - empire11dCommented
It was evening time and Central Park was nearly empty save for one person. A boy of thirteen was sitting alone on one of the benches. There was a new touch screen mobile in his hands, which he had bought today.
It was the time of the evening. The Central Park was nearly empty save for one person. A boy of thirteen was sitting alone at one of the bench. There was a new touch screen mobile in his hands, which he had bought today. - empire13dCommented
Sar Mell is a ruined city of the Rhoynar that sits on the eastern bank of the Rhoyne to the north of Volantis in western Essos. Almost directly across the river to the west sits the city of Volon Therys
As Jay embarked on his journey towards the Summer Sea, his target being the Ser Mell River, he could only guide Igneel in the right direction to ride. He wasn't entirely sure of his location; for him, there seemed to be no end to the vast sea. Hours turned into days, and he eagerly awaited any glimpse of land in the distance. - empire13dCommented
No, like why is being god-like unfortunate
Now, who was Nymeria? She happened to be one of the Rhoynish princesses, and my mission was to assist her escape. This made me a traitor by association, but who would suspect a 10-year-old boy of doing anything significant? Unfortunately, I could tap into 60 percent of Raizel's power at this point which is god like. - empire13dReplied to Nacht_ImpCh 4 Chapter 4:"Dragon Tear"
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'is for thoughts' "is for speech"
'Yes, you're excused i'll see you at dinner.' She said dismissing me. - empire115dPosted
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Celestial Empire ???????
One must not harbor malicious intentions, but one must not be defenseless either. This was the teaching of his parents in the 'previous life' and the view held by most people in the Celestial Empire. - empire115dReplied to Arcanemissile
its a typo
It was now the year 1474 in the Sea Calendar. Although Roger had yet to utter his world-famous line, "My treasure? If you want it, you can have it!", the chaos at sea was no less than in the future. - empire115dReplied to Taro
- empire123dCommented
yes I'll stick with the only clue Hydra currently has my name, genius
After some thought, Savant answered, "Savant Smith. I'd like that as my name." - empire123dCommented
how did he not incinerate the 2 people he shot in the incinerator room?
I should've incinerated those two guys. I should've put on some shoot on my face to mask myself in the factory. I didn't even wear a mask while selling the car. How could I be so stupid?