I really like the story so far and I think it is a good story concept. Though it could really do with some editing, I found having to make sense of certain bits really took me out of the story. Maybe try and find a beta reader or give chatGTP a go. I do hope the Auther keeps going though as this story looks like it has some real potential and the grammar is still better than a lot of the translations on this site
It had been a sudden chance meeting between them. The boy had left his book in the cafeteria and Lex was tasked by a teacher to return it to him. He had been curious about the Mathematics book which was not taught at the school. Being bored, he had solved all of the sums in the whole book in only 32 minutes. He could have done it even sooner, if not for the action of drinking tea in between questions.
However Benjamin or simply 'Ben' was extremely weak in Chemistry, Physics and Mathematics. He took tuition from the biggest Professors in London, yet was struggling in those subjects.
Robert or Lex couldn't help but sigh at the antics of the boy in front of him. Benjamin Drake was one of his seniors, or perhaps a close friend despite their age difference. He had been insistent on joining MIT to study chemical engineering. His family had a paint business and were one of the wealthy lots of London.
"Lex. We did it. I succeeded in cracking the entrance exam of MIT. You were right on everything mate!" The boy exclaimed happily. He didn't bother about the personal space of his little friend and immediately grabbed the boy in a hug.
It was evening time and Central Park was nearly empty save for one person. A boy of thirteen was sitting alone on one of the benches. There was a new touch screen mobile in his hands, which he had bought today.
The MC's personality really ruined this for me That said the story is a good idea and is well written with only a little bit of editing needed.
Sar Mell is a ruined city of the Rhoynar that sits on the eastern bank of the Rhoyne to the north of Volantis in western Essos. Almost directly across the river to the west sits the city of Volon Therys
No, like why is being god-like unfortunate
This is a copy and paste of Womgi's "Of Wands and Kunai" https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5846162/8/Of-Wands-and-Kunai
This is a copy and paste of Womgi's "Of Wands and Kunai" https://www.fanfiction.net/s/5846162/8/Of-Wands-and-Kunai .....................................................................................................................
'is for thoughts' "is for speech"
Celestial Empire ???????
its a typo
yes I'll stick with the only clue Hydra currently has my name, genius
how did he not incinerate the 2 people he shot in the incinerator room?