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japprentice2yrCommentedauthor is set on using "Itsuki my boy" anywhere. reads weird. also "Itsuki big brother"
"Itsuki my boy is right, Gary. Even I'm surprised to see a regional variant here in Kanto. Well it makes sense since this egg came from Alola."- japprentice2yrReplied to ValkoWolfCh 4 Chapter 4 : Green
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oak said "his daughter just gave birth" in one paragraph and in another daisy informed him her mother is going to give birth soon. an I missing something here? your use of "ho ho" sounds/reads weird. I wish there was no limit to number of moves learned by Pokémon (for all Pokémon, not just MC's); only hard training required.
Ch 2 Chapter 2 : A New Life! - japprentice3yrCommentedCh 3 Chapter 3
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also as shown by the ability to create the seal for danger awareness- the system can create new or advance potion recipe, spells, rituals, enchantments etc. Don't hesitate to use it author. MC can start a magical Revolution. also magitech.
Ch 14 Chapter 14: Hogwart's Library - japprentice3yrCommented
the author should remember that the system could create a single book or multiple volumes based on difficulty for each subject based on all the books the MC has scanned. he has already done so for the exercise and nutrition book. this is a very powerful ability you have given to the system, don't nerf or forget it.
Ch 14 Chapter 14: Hogwart's Library - japprentice3yrCommented
3 useless chapters. why even write it?? why did he go to Gotham?, just so he can watch Bruce's parents die live? and Catwoman seeing him there WTF!?
I just follow selina from a distance absentmindedly, the scene from before repeating in my head as a movie scene. After skipping 2 or 3 roofs in an impressive show of parkour, she goes down in a different alley and looks up straight at me - japprentice3yrCommented
has the meaning of isekai changed or did I misunderstand it ?? this story became a multiverse travel type story, which I don't like. beginner writers should avoid it.
As he walked inside the city, he confirmed that this world was indeed an isekai world. He could see a monster's body being carried inside the city probably to sell at the so-called adventurer's guild. In addition, he saw some people using magic and he was extremely excited to be able to use magic in this world. Back in the world of Arashina, some people could use something similar to magic but it was merely to forcibly transform their energy into special propriety and it was extremely difficult and it cost a lot of energy. As such, no one actually bothered to learn to transform their energy and instead used it to strengthen themselves. However, he understood that if he could learn magic in this world, he should be able to use it on Arashina which would make him stronger than the average Hunters. - japprentice3yrCommented
I am not liking where this is going
'Euh? An adventurer guild? Could this world be one of those isekai where there is adventurer doing various tasks like killing monsters, exploring dungeons and collecting herbs? As for the skill icon, I hope I'm right about what it does.' - japprentice3yrCommented
choosing begger
A while later, dizzy due to the transfer, Aurus opened his eyes and looked around. He was currently in a forest and he could see walls of a city a little further away. Making his way to the village, he looked at himself and saw that he was wearing a patched-up old green tunic. While he wanted to curse for the clothes he was wearing, he understood that in this world, it was more likely common wear. - japprentice3yrCommented
isn't she almost 16?
"Alright brother, be sure to be safe, I'll see you tomorrow. By the way, I want toasts and strawberries for breakfast." Along with this, she gave him a silly smile and went back upstairs to her room. - japprentice3yrCommented
yes your highness. of course your highness.
'Well let's set aside the contracted beast for the moment. I don't even know what kind of world I'm going to and I'm already fantasizing about mythical beasts. Furthermore, I have to be extremely careful about my contracted beasts since they will be my partner for the rest of my life. I can't accept a second-rated beast even for my first one as it will only lower my qualifications in the future. As such, I won't accept any lousy beasts and will try to only get mythical beasts for myself in the future. Well, in the end, I guess I'll only contract with mythical beasts. - japprentice3yrCommented
seen too many dragons and phoenex in my life on this earth. too common
Of course, as a man from Earth before his transmigration in this world, he hoped to have dragons and phoenixes as contracted beasts but there weren't any in this world. He could only hope that there would be some in the other world. But even then, could he even contract with them? They were supposedly extremely fierce and rare monsters. If he wanted to contract them, he would have to wait for a while before trying. - japprentice3yrCommented
last line ??
[Task: To open your shop, one needs not only a shop but also the products. In the world of Arashina, the cultivation resources for monsters are extremely poor. Enter a world rich in resources, collect them and complete the tasks. (Note, when going to another world, you cannot bring anything with you. The system will give clothes to the user upon arrival in the other world. For the resources collected, the user will have to select them before leaving.) - japprentice3yrCommented
don't fear the robbers
When one entered the shop, there was a counter on the left side of the room which was where the clients would have to pay for their expenses and in addition to the counter, there were small display cabinets on the walls all around the shop and in the center was a small number of display cabinets made of crystal. It was easy to understand that the items in the center of the shop would be extremely luxurious goods.