LeechesOfSoul
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nah, he is chinanumberone MC will 1 woman be enough??? let's time prove this.
she is translator of this book back then in 'gravity tales', long before Webnovel born and translate their own book.
when merchan use translator he can understand mc talking without tranlator. and mc can understand the tranlated language from merchant without him using translator device. and now what about the bear??? its big plot hole.
he ride the bear at the back in the day. and ride the bear at the front in the night. shota echi. :3
he kill his fellow monster and fellow goblin kin for exp. its fine he has goal. (even tought its stupid decision) what i hate is if this 'shota echi' become generic mc in the end when he come to human country. where he is become some simp for random girl or he Become hypocrite when come to killing human. if it come like this i will drop this right away. but if it ruthless MC then its still worth reading. now, wait and see.
Riverfood sound weird. Seafood sound better. :v
~(*< . . . *nom nom nom*
diferent between 10 s sprint amd 9s sprint is world apart. :3
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From objective view your chess piece move like story is great and greatly executed. But from personal view, I dont like this conspiracy and intrigue cuz this will eat your (author) brain capacity so the advanture story with MC point of view will be reduced its portion.
Critic and sugestion : i myself as reader more liked if the background of the story is hazy and make us guess the back ground our self. This will make us have sense of achivment and make us being tied to the story more. And personaly i dont liked other POV than MC. And dont liked the intrigue/hiden plot being explained (except if it has surfaced and affect the MC directly or MC make realization of the plot himself) Hope my feed back can be some sort of help to you. Creation is hard. Cheers up! And thanks you for your hard work.
Plot explained: The system is actualy the ramnant soul of the inate sun god. After being robed his divinity in his last breath he make the system as last life line . But his consciousness is shatered already so the system just operate by instinc and chose MC as host. All because he know the acquired sun god regol working with godess of fate so he chose someone outside of fate, which is MC who from another world. (Just my opinion and fan fiction.)