Solid idea, poor execution. The grammar is horrendous, which is confusing since the first 20 chapters were okay. Then chapter 21, where the titles are all capitalized for whatever reason, it gets really bad. I dunno if it’s English as another language or poor machine translation copy-paste. Unpalatable regardless.

The author skips over the difficulties of making guns. Like where did the gun powder come from? Make good percussion caps so the cartridge doesn’t misfire? How did the blacksmith know how to make the scope, specifically the lenses? Did the other two guys practice before?

The writing, grammar wise, is fairly terrible. It’s all in passive voice, so everything sounds funny. It makes it less enjoyable to read. Honestly it seems to be on purpose to make the word coung longer. Even if English isn’t your first language, you have to actively try to sound like Yoda all the time. I think the wrong tense choice is also because of everything being in passive voice. Grammar aside, the story is wonderful thus far. Interesting magic system and world development. It’s not one size fits all, you have X tiers of power with X subtiers. It seems different enough to stick out, but not unnecessarily complicated just to be different.

The passive voice is driving me mad. It’s like Yoda is talking. All. The. Time.

Mixed feelings about this chapter. I think if there was more internal monologue cementing that he isn’t Alex anymore since he can’t even think of his old name and had to be Shang now it would have been better. Instead it’s the author describing what the character feels and thinks instead of the character telling us.

I like the world building set in medieval times. The protagonist isn’t shielded by plot armor left and right. Side charactes are developed and have a distinct feel. Magic & knight system are kind of glossed over, same with the enemy’s power level. My only big complaint is the over use of rhyming. It started as a distinctive MC trait, and now every other character is doing it. Like characters who were introduced earlier weren’t doing it are now doing it. It’s kind of becoming a detriment to the dialog, because instead of working on different character’s tone it’s become how can I make things rhyme and kind of get my point across.

The one glaring problem is the author’s issue switching between 1st & 3rd person perspectives randomly. It’ll start with he (Elias) doing something then jumping to I (Elias) am doing something. Does that with other characters. A smaller complaint is the transition between chapters. It makes everything feel disjointed. Everything else is wonderful. The world development is interesting. The magic system isn’t tropey. He doesn’t have plot armor defending him left and right. I like the idea of the runes even if I don’t think they’re named aptly. Norse have runes, but I think India and similar cultures technically use scripts.

Should have commented after reading lol

Tier

Good story so far. Not tropey. Grabs your interest. You need an editor though, the grammar is pretty bad. Wrong tenses & run on sentences.

The story itself is rather enjoyable. Rather quick paced with very little to no filler. He basically gets a day of rest before he needs to go back into action. The universe isn’t overly unique, but still fairly developed. The side characters aren’t super devloped. They feel more like place holders while the MC does his thing. The most glaring issues are the terrible grammar and continuity. Plural and conjugation errors abound. Definitely in need of a proofreader. People and things are spelt one way then changed mid chapter. And then there are random ramblings interjected in the middle of the story for no explicable reason. Final thoughts: interesting without the usual tropes of most cultivation novels. Which this is, it’s just set in space with science and technology.

You said a week-ish, but still radio silence. Hope you’re feeling better and it’s not too serious.

R&R, feel better

Enjoy your coma.

Bye! Enjoy your break.

Updated from my previous review now that I’ve read all the free chapters. The grammar doesn’t get any better. There are “paragraphs” of just run on sentences. The author definitely needs an editor. Now that the Gender Bender is a permenate thing, Marcus just coasts through being a girl like nothing is different at all. There’s a modicum of it when he has to learn how to wear underwear and a dress, but mostly it’ background until he offends someone and they’re pissed off he’s a girl.

Just started, but it needs to be said that the grammar is terrible. The fisst 3 chapters have been edited, but they still read awkwardly. Too many commas and run ons. Like they had a bunch of run ons in the first place and tried to fix it by adding commas in weird places instead of rewriting the sentences. I do enjoy the use of the Oxford comma though, it is nice when they list various things and has it there.

Is no one going to mention the last name change? Or that his mother’s age changed?

Sword Ki or Qi

Overall the story is great. Distinct characters with their own voices. The antagonists are a little cookie cutter, always, “Who is this nobody? I’m the greatest”. The universe is interesting, though still filled with mystery. The only complaint I really have is that grammer needs work.