Reviews of Superpowers? Yes please!
Superpowers? Yes please!
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Hey everyone, I'm the author of SPYP and I'm just making sure everyone knows the situation. I'm a complete beginner in terms of webnovel writing, so I'm not sure my abilities will be able to meet expectations but I appreciate any feedback and comments. Also my release schedule will probably be S,T,Th and bonus chapters if the feedback is good enough. Most importantly, I am a college student so I might not be able to upload some days, if that happens I will try to make up for it the next day. Thank you and I hope you enjoy the story!
This story is very good, to make it better, I recommend the author to imagine that he is the MC, imagining that he is in his own novel, you can do better descriptions of the battle scenes, etc, I recommend reading the novel ¨The Defeated Dragon'' can find it in novel updates, it is a novel where it seems that the author of truth is inside the novel, there is a lot of detail, he would not know how to describe it, although he advances slowly, it is enjoyable, maybe if he reads it give him some inspiration and write better his novel or make longer chapters, in another comment leave a great idea or suggestion to the author on how you can develop your novel.
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There nothing wrong with the writing or the general plot, but it's made unreadable by the stupid idea to make the mc and the princess who didn't give a crap about him before friends. You can tell the writer is shipping the two because the mc suddenly thinks about how they are "similar" blah blah blah more crap about how they are both cold. It's just annoying to have to read the super obvious shipping between the mc and a princess who's came out of bloody nowhere. It's pretty good in general but I'm done reading this novel because it's going to piss me off every time I read anything related to it, and there's definitely going to be tons of stuff related to it just looking at the cliche style of the systems missions and how they met.
author, please the novel has a great future, maybe they can even hire the author, I like that it does not advance so fast and explains things well, the esper reference to''toaru majutsu no index''?, I wonder what skill woke up, if your requirement to awaken it was to reach level five of copper's esper range, then the ability must have a huge load for the whole body, if the body is not powerful enough, it will not be able to resist the ability, it would be great if it obtained the ability from ''all for one, of the anime boku no hero academia'', is the ability that the villain has, allows him to steal the skills of others and make them his own, also can combine them to create new attacks, also allows him to grant stolen skills of other people, example: if the MC steals someone's ability, this skill becomes his, but if he wants to give him the ability he stole from another person, he can do it, maybe if the MC wakes up this skill, you could add him to Go back to the skill and change the name, it would not be the same, if the MC woke up this ability, instead of killing those who beat him for not having skill, he can steal them, by doing this, he could make they feel what it is not to have a skill, they literally will descend from heaven to hell, their families will despise them and maybe they will banish them and they will not have anything, besides that with this ability, the MC will be able to steal the enemies' powerful ability, will not have to worry about the repercussions, which can be done by a person without an ability ?, nothing, but a requirement to steal the skill is that first the MC has to defeat them, so that the skill is not too broken, the MC would look for the stronger skills and would be done with them and would be invincible in the future, and immortal, because surely there is a skill that makes you immortal not ?, If it is not haci, can be two, example: a skill gives you life eternal, and another gives you a capacity of super regeneration, this ability allows you to rebuild your whole body up to a drop of blood, but desmora a lot of time (10 years or more ?, of course if you add another skill called super acceleration, you can accelerate this process and only will need a year or less ?, besides that as the MC to said that they live in refuge cities (they are enclosed by the beasts from the outside) he could build his own empire, to do that he would have to be super powerful and intelligent, and have a squad of faithful followers to help him, could find a group of children orphans, these children would see him as their savior and they will always be faithful to him, then he begins to train them, and with his ability, he can give these children skills I steal from other bad people, not so strong (3 stars or more if the limit is 5, maybe the strongest skills are 10 stars? or was it the other way round?), but if the skills are united, they will be extremely strong, then the legend of the invincible squad would begin, where each member has 4 skills (3 that gives them the MC and the original skill of this) the squadron could be from 5 -10 child (s), (better if all the children were women, so that when they grow up they are all wives of the MC, after all an emperor needs an empress and concubines) the MC could steal in the future a skill share or union ?, an unknown use of this skill could be that ..., I better explain it with an example: the MC has the ability of eternal life (a skill of the highest ranks, although it has no offensive power, through training you can be very strong, this process is very slow, a normal person would never live long enough to get the benefits, but if you have eternal life?), have wives, do not want these to die of old age, then with the ability union or share, oo tra (has a maximum of the number of skills you can share, example: 4?), bind your ability to eternal life to one or more people, making all your wives have eternal life as long as the MC is alive and they are faithful to him, because if they leave with another or betray him, the MC withdraws this option and the one that abandoned or betrayed him, begins to age again, the MC builds his mega empire with which he dominates the planet becoming the stronger person of this, with the most powerful skills that I steal, then the story of the novel expands into space and the MC discovers that there is more life in the universe, and in the end the MC becomes the most powerful, capable to create universes, etc has this great thing that I came up with for this novel, no?
Hello, Author. I do hope that you continue this novel for a while as it has successfully peeked my interest. The quality of your writing is quite good and so far is the concept of getting a system in the world that the MC currently is in, if you know what I mean (He isn't reincarnated or anything like that). I will change my review once the story has gotten a bit further, but I can't exactly write a detailed review about the character design and story development yet.
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