I like the setup at the start. The story Has excellent potential. I would suggest you look up the show not tell technique. It will help you become A better writer—overall great story.
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a wonderfully structured story with a good cast of main leads, realistic progression, and dialogues.
an excellent writing style, coupled with a good idea. a nice read.
Wow, reading this story keeps me turning up and down. I really enjoyed every bit of it kind to the fullest. Simple and clear piece, please read this piece.
Author did a great job in describing the character. Cultivation genre is not my cup of tea but I am curious as to this novel. You did a good job, Author!😊🧡
I've read a few chapters into the book and it doesn't disappoint. The plot's straight forward and the grammatical construct of the story is just okay. A solid read. keep it up author!
Nice plot, interesting synopsis and world-building... cannot wait for more chapters! (14014014014014000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000)
Very interesting story. Using a female as a lead is not an easy thing. I really commend you on that. You should try to always give space to know the dialogue and narrator so as to differentiate between which and which it is.
Your story will really make a great sell if it's contracted.