kuhaku_sora
As of CH 34: So, so interesting! The story of NPCs and a player oohhh. Plus the fairytales tie in...ohhhh Ok, so it's really really good. The story does have some grammar flaws, just things such as plurals, modifiers, etc. Notably, less near the end. (Yay! Improvement <3)Some sentences should have a bit more clarification. The POV switch does confuse me sometimes but probably because I got really interested in the other POV. Great immersion. The world-building is nice and the characters really do have their own personalities :) Overall a recommended read! Great Job.
Perfection, that is what I can describe this book as. The system and everything about this world is well done, and the characters are well realized. The beginning is blood pumping and great, giving us the proper motivation to Red's adventure. Grammar and composition are also great since I barely see any errors at all. Overall, like I said, this is perfect and I like it. Keep up the good work author!
This book is amongst the handful of books I truly believe should be made into a comic or even an animated show. You really describe every detail about the world so well and made a new reader out of me. Not exaggerating by giving it 5 stars because it truly deserves it. One day I'll come back and find my review when it is turned into a comic or show. Wishing you all the best with this story.
The book is awesome. And I love the book cover. I was completely hooked on the story ever since I read the first paragraph. To be honest the plotline of the story was very different from the ones I usually read but this one completely blown me away. If you want a change from the usual modern stories this is the one for you. All the best with your story mate.
When I started reading, I thought it was like Sword Art Online ( the one game anime I have ever seen lol) but no, this is wayy different from it. The grammar is flawless. I envy your writing skill lol. I am speechless at your world background. I could imagine the world very clearly. and yes, breaking the rules always sound fun😂 All the best, author!!
The first chapter was a good read, some of the dialogue felt a little off, but maybe it's because I'm conditioned to different styles of writing, not that it made me want to stop reading or ruined the immersion. The thought of an NPC breaking the boundaries of the code they were forced into is somewhat inspiring when you realize that we as people aren't too different. I also noticed some unanswered questions and plot points lingering in the story, so good luck finding those answers.