Elle_Lynn
Author, I think your creativity is spot on, and you have great potential to be successful writer! 💯 Just a bit of advice… Now that you’ve reached the end of this story, it would be a GREAT FAVOR 🙏🏽🙏🏼 to future readers if you could go back and PROOFREAD your work — making grammatical corrections and changing incorrect word usage where applicable. Please STOP using words you don’t fully understand or know how to use in context; seriously, that’s a major issue you have. 😩 It’s okay to use simple language if you have to because it will save the readers a few braincells 🧠 from trying to comprehend what the heck you’re talking about! LOL Overall, it’s a good plot, but the poorly quality writing is quite distracting from the narrative and lowers the mastery of the storyline, especially when the reader has to decipher what you probably… most likely… maybe meant to write. Yet and still, I’m rooting for you! 🙌🏽🙌🏼🙌
Cute storyline 😁💞 The family aspect at the end with a twist for a new adventure for the parents and the kids was better than an abrupt ending in my opinion[img=recommend]. I would have to say the translation and grammar could use a little more work but I was able to read it with little difficulty. I followed this story from the beginning. Keep writing and I will read❤️👍😁