Reviews of Harry Potter: New World
Harry Potter: New World
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dude it's a good fanfic I give you a solid 4 star but I think you should reduce on going full scientific research on magic it's good and all but recent chapters it's a bit too much.i like what you written on how magic works in the hp verse but I think you are going too much into it lately.
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I don't to be mean or rude in anyway that the Mc is an idiot in someway shape or form. This doesn't include anything else like how the story is and it's characters. I think the mc should get some elves and use them in someway. At the rate of improvement that the mc is going, his level of skill and power would just be adequate. He can't seem to think of ways of making money or increasing his magic output, but the only thing he does instead is waste time questioning things and talk about philosophical ideals that aren't really important since it just a fanfic. If we're really being real here most of this story is just about the mc questions things that are either stupid or are helpful to no one. He's a grown adult in a kids body he needs to utilize past knowledge and apply them in real life because at this rate kid mc is just an idiot being more of an idiot
I've really liked this story. Lordinsanity review probably nick picks the few story points that you could find fault with. There are a number of small mistakes in the writing; misspellings, a missing comma and probably mistranslation to less than ideal words. Mostly things that you could read past or would only take you a second to infer the meaning. There are some areas where this is annoying because I'm not sure if he is using a different word to make me think 9f something else. For example, Dumbledore is referred as Director and not Headmaster a lot, don't know if that's intentional. However replacing God with Old man, which I think is the lame title he gave to the being that reincarnated him, makes sense and probably done on purpose. I kinda wish I read it on the app to give paragraph comments for mistakes. However I dislike it.
This story is quite unique compared to most other of the same like on this site. the story progression is consistent, the characters are well enough fleshed out, and the main character's powers progress at a believable pace. Overall i recommend this story quite a bit. And it's not cringe in my humble opinion.
OMG the start is so cringe as something can be. the mc is so opcessed with that Malfoy family because they abandoned him and disregards hes adopted parents. and they are only mentioned by name ones or twice. why is he opcessed, he is a reincarnator it does not make sense that he is so opcessed with his new 'biological' family and are not just enjoying life with a adopted family that raised him
Honestly, this story is worse than some MTL stories. The writing quality is really bad There are a lot of grammatical errors and there is no story flow it's hard to read and hard to understand. The story development is nonsensical and the dialogue between characters is so awkward. The MC itself is a badly written "Chinese Young Master" which is very dumb for someone that is in his second life. The world background is nonexistent since the author did not explain anything about the MC's view of the world and just use our prior knowledge about the canon version as a world background which is a really bad move for the story itself.
Subpar and it is similar to MTL's out there. Writing quality is bad as there are tons of grammar lapses that results to a confusing story. The route where the story goes is the same as in the HP movies with an additional SI MC in the mix. Character design is super flawed as he is an adult with a know how to the HP story but doesn't utilize his future knowledge.
