Young_Master_Jay
I to say this is a story with great potential. grammar: good overall, I did not find much in term of mistakes or grammatical errors. Flow: the flow is nice and things just fall nicely in place so there is no difficulty reading or following events. story: you could just read the synopsis, but I have to say that it's a nice touch to merge fantasy elements with the modern setting. The chapters a quite long, whether that is a plus or minus is for you to decide, I just wanted to inform you. Finally, good job to the author, you are on the right path here with a story that has a lot of potential so keep going.