Comments of chapter undefined of Ben 10: In Pokemon World with Different Omnitrix

I like this chapter but there are a few mistakes like their aren't quotations when talking in some areas and when the boy took the picture I don't what andre means along with extra words that make no sense. Also you seem to over exaggerate the atmosphere and his emotions repeatedly at times like when you try over describe some emotions and scenes and repeat yourself . I like the system for the omnitrix set up but it needs more explaining on its functionality like why it's called a hightrix like when Andre was confused when it explained the genetic changes. also I'd lable points of view as it can get confusing on who's talking at first. Overall other that some mistakes it's a good story so far and if I personally rate it it would be 4 out of 5 stars. Hope this helps.

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