Comments of chapter undefined of Lord Voldemort SI

you're writing is amazing, but there's a big problem, your story line isn't. it's unreasonable, 1, that a person would suddenly take the role of voldemort without apprehension, and 2, that they would be effective and understand it easily, even with Riddles memories, and that's not even counting the fact that most of the first chapters are just info dumping as opposed to story building. you've got fight scenes down, but other than that, you have some learning to do, my guy