Comments of chapter undefined of The Dungeon Conquerors: Journey to the Peak

The battle scene felt bland. lacked color, intensity, vividness, if that makes sense. You've also fallen victim to the common sin of verbose exposition at the start of your story, which is annoying and disappointing. None of it needs to be known urgently and they can be implied on their own here and there in coming chapters. Based on your synopsis I gather that your overall story is very bland and lacks any real conflict, problem or character development.

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