Comments of chapter undefined of The Dungeon Conquerors: Journey to the Peak
The Dungeon Conquerors: Journey to the Peak
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The battle scene felt bland. lacked color, intensity, vividness, if that makes sense. You've also fallen victim to the common sin of verbose exposition at the start of your story, which is annoying and disappointing. None of it needs to be known urgently and they can be implied on their own here and there in coming chapters. Based on your synopsis I gather that your overall story is very bland and lacks any real conflict, problem or character development.
Hmm, thanks for the input and allow me to address it. 1. I personally like to know about the power system and other stuff at the start even as a reader and I have not actually seen many books doing that. It's just a personal preference of mine. Sorry, to make to disappointed but I like it that way. What a sinner I am. 2. And yes, you're absolutely right about the second point. It is a slice of life story but the everyday life was going to be full of action and adventure. 3. There will be character developments obviously. Who said one needed a well defined problem since the beginning. Problems are something that suddenly spring up without any warning and here it is going to be the same. ... Thanks for taking your precious time to make these criticisms. I really appreciate it. (*＾3＾)/～♡
