Comments of chapter undefined of Time Effect ( A Mass Effect Fanfiction)
Time Effect ( A Mass Effect Fanfiction)
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Awesome chapter keep up the good work, Authur [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=fp][img=fp][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=golden ticket][img=golden ticket][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
huh so mc adding jack to the harem? i mean im not agasint it, but just hope you wont go crazy about it, having, liara, shepard, kali and veronica is enough, maybe even RR, jack can strech things a little bit but it will be fine, but beyond that its too much. please dont add more than this girls, its not even needed
As mentioned in a review. You dont explain or describe things at all. And this is very bad. Whether its an object, a person, the surroudings or a race, you dont say what they/it look like even once. The only reader who will understand this novel are those who played all 4 games. The only time you did show some.was in the short explanation chapter on what some races look like. But thats a very lazy way of doing things as you do not incorporste those descriptions into your story which causes a huge drop in quality.