MorTemTK
I don't get it, did they really believe they are doing a good thing by kidnapping kids from their parents? Are they mentally ill? Also, please try to cut out some of the descriptions. I've noticed this as a common problem in novels with ai involved, even when it's just editing. The ai tends to add far too many descriptions like how people are filled with determination (that alone is mentioned too many times in this chapter), or outright stating the emotions or "loyalty" displayed by a character. To put it bluntly, the ai is terrible at "Show, Don't Tell." Instead of saying someone is filled with determination, let their actions do the talking. Instead of saying someone's eyes or mind were filled with fear, show it, such as simply stating the person "trembled." To put things simply, you need to be less explicit, more implicit. Let the readers have some room for their imagination. A person can tremble for many reasons, but you know exactly what they are feeling if you just tell it straight, and that's not good when most of the content is like that.