Not a bad first start but the chapter needs some editing. If you want to draw in more readers, the first chapter shouldn't make your readers brain hurt. I'm not saying this to annoy you but as helpful advice if you want your novel to grab more people's attention besides from the title and synopsis.
Hey, interesting first chapter! How about we connect on Discord? It's a cool place to hang out and chat about your stories. Could you give me your Discord ID if you're up for it?
