Shonpufi
bro, I was waiting for some big plans that maybe was overshadowed long time ago, but all I get is a waste in the form of an extended rating game with a low character being unecessary buffed, plus there is nothing to gain from this. I don't even understand your MC, he is totally random, and sometimes do stupid things when he is considered super smart. you can't write a smart character if you aren't smart yourself, because the characters can only be as smart as their maker, unfortunitly to show that your MC is smart instead of actually making him smart, you are making everyone else dumb or force something to happen to show that MC is smart when it doesn't make sense. you messed everything, plus you smashed the crossover in a very chaotic and random way. you messed the timeline, characters age, everyone's intelligence, and described MCs random whims as big brain plans, all I see is an edgelord with no actual personality getting things he doesn't deserve, it was stupid and overkill already to have MC interfer with rating game, but adding Welt? completely unecessary, like MC couldn't oneshot/solo Riser and his Peerage (not pierage) with all the powers he have, Riser and his little harem shouldn't even make Otto use more than 1% of his power, beside interfering in the rating game only because he meet rias for a few minutes years ago!?! its like being a. adult who is hanging around little kids, bro the guy is the leader of an organisation and should be one of the strongest in the world, but here he is wasting time hanging around kids playing highschool kid instead of having actual plans, he come all the way from germany to a tiny town in japan to play highschool with teen devils. bro he is in the league of factions leaders and pantheon heads, but still mess around kids. I tried finding anything worthy about this story but nothing, I kept reading despite you butchering Otto and butchering Honkai Impact characters... I wish you luck but this ain't for me, just want to point that you should decide on what's your MC's goal, and what is the endgame for this story. where is this going? what is your plot (beside just following the original when it doesn't benefit you anyway)
lol really dont know why the author giving riser a protagonist like treatment like this? he not only make himself more powerful he also copy the mc's technique with ease. the author make riser like the protagonist who grow while fighting a losing fight. so are we going to change the main character now? is riser the real protagonist of your novel? his domain expansion can be consider unique ability of him but now riser copied it so in the next chapter we will witness so many domain expansion user from devil faction.
Agora isso virou porcaria pura. Desculpe autor, mais o nĂvel de ridĂculo tem que ter limite. A novel atĂ© que estava boa mais essa luta, simplesmente arruinou tudo o que vocĂȘ trabalhou durante o começo. Sei que vocĂȘ disse que nĂŁo era muito bom em escrever batalhas, mais aqui vocĂȘ simplesmente nem se importou com o nĂvel de poder, vocĂȘ sĂł foi acrescentando mais e mais sem nenhum critĂ©rio verdadeiro. Boa sorte e atĂ© mais.