Comments of chapter undefined of I thought i could be happy
I thought i could be happy
Ryukiro
Chapter comments6
Yeah man on the one hand you are portraying that how much love and possessiveness Emma as a gf has towards mc while on the other hand you are continuously showing her as weak and afraid to confide in mc type who is always hiding things from mc instead of working together with him to solve their problems. Making her act and seem like a cheater even though you clearly said it’s not a cheating or a ntr type of book. Plus this drama is literally taking too long just like those FL misunderstanding books where such things stretches for 35 or 40 chapters or sometimes more or those online romantic dramas. If you take too long to develop the other readers might lose interest, hope everything with mc and Ema is sorted fast and they are together. Going with current pace, the mc development seems too slow, he instead of properly discussing and mending things with his gf and other people is acting on impulses just like a small child. Other than that writing quality is maintained.
Thank you for everything, I’ll take note of everything you just said😊😊 The story will take a different direction now, I’ll be faster and more impactful about it. I sometime lose myself into details. But that’s also because the story is long and there are a lot of things to discover. As I said in another comment, I’ll also release PoVs from other characters alongside new chapters to make you fully immerge and understand their action. Don’t worry about that. Even if Ema is acting like that, I said that this is not a NtR book. I wouldn’t lie on something like that ❤️
Hello author my English not that good but I will try to tell what I feel. I agree with above points said by 2-3 people but what I want to say is you seem to be putting/ introducing many misunderstandings or mysteries in a short period of time like regarding mc girlfriend , mc family, mc Friends, mc livelihood, mc interactions etc which might be appearing as a good form of character development from your side but to readers appearing as a frustrating, long teasing plot reads just like those high school Japanese books where plot is full of unforeseen situations and helplessnessness which I kinda stopped reading some time back. It’s better to take and complete or clear one thing or one situation at a time.
