Comments of chapter undefined of An Eldritch Demon's Odyssey
An Eldritch Demon's Odyssey
FoolishSociopath
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It would be interesting if Momonga had a transformation where he temporarily has a flesh body for interesting interactions in the future and I hope the body's influence is significant enough so that MC isn't just an annoying sociopath who acts like a machine
KotakuLv4Kotaku
It's good, but I think it's better to reduce how planned the MC already has the things that are going to happen, for example, putting scenes in which Lilith acts in a more natural way for a child, as if she acted on instinct without so much manipulation (due to the influence of her body and you could say that kind of being reborn has this side effect)
FoolishSociopath:~So fo you think what I have done so far is good or bad? I am trying really hard to do good character development in this fanfic. Any pointers would help~
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