Raj_Shah_7152
Like the previous chapter, I feel like this one is also lacking questions and information. But I want to focus on a different problem. Leo's actions and behavior don't make sense. It's as if he is playing an MMO game without real life stakes. He doesn't have much of an emotional response to the threat to his life posed by quest failure. which is strange considering he was crying a few chapters ago when his mother sold her own kidney. He should have some kind of emotions and complex thoughts that the reader can see.