Comments of chapter undefined of Neo Soul King Yhwach

brotha you got to stop using the "Name: dialogue" tamplate when making an interaction cuz it leaves much to be desired. The best way to make an interaction is to write the dialogue than put the name of person who said it with either an frown, anger or anything to showcase extra details of the character (" dialogue" said brian with a stern tone behind his voice OR "dialogue" a frowning brian appeared behind the tree with his index and thumb grasping his chin.) just be creative with it. Also the best way to do world building is through dialogue, DIALOGUE aka interaction with and between characters THAT MATCHES THEIR SETTING (sir Johnson, son of Jon, to the house of Jreald, is a rank grand knight who is polite and well mannered to anyone regardless of position or race, but don't let that fool you as he has shown the willingness to exhibit extreme prejudice towards those he deem enemies and evil with his sword as seen in battle of narmguirde fortress) there also huge amounts of details you could add in between the dialogue and the actions of the characters when doing anything(walking, seeing, noticing, etc) that what really makes the story worth reading especially in combat scenes where the combatants are shown their techniques not just through names BUT through details of how there techniques look (example, the "Rock smashing fist" Jons hands form into a fists, with his left fist near his left hip and his right fist moved at a blur to bury itself in the abdomen of knight of the Dradon) Anyways my bad, I want on a giant tangent. for what am talking about read 'I become a pope, now what?' it's pretty good and has displayed everything that I said with great success that makes me what to Nut, yes you read it right NUT, N.U.T. the thing that comes out every Man BA-- anyways that's enough yapping, have a good one.